Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The process chart illustrates the process of how sugar is being produced from sugar cane.

Overall, there are seven stages in producing sugar from sugar cane starting from growing of sugar cane to drying and cooling of sugar. Where, including main steps growing, crushing to making Juice then purifying with limestone and centrifuge for separating sugar crystals from syrup.

To begin with, the growing period of sugar cane takes place for 12-18 months. Followed by harvesting, in harvesting people cut the sugar cane and store at a site called then storage truck take them to factory. After that that the step is crushing where we put sugar canes into the crushing machine from upper side and and making juice from down side. After making juice, the juice will be purify from limestone filter.

Followed the filtration step, juice will be put in evaporator to make syrup of it with heating. Sixth stage is centrifuge where sugar crystals will be separated from syrup. Finally, after separating sugar crystals drying and cooling step where sugar will be dried and cooled.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the process from cane growth through to drying and cooling, and the overview correctly identifies seven stages and the main transformation from cane to sugar. The stated growing period and the roles of the limestone filter, evaporator and centrifuge are also reported accurately. This gives the response a solid account of the diagram. However, some details are unclear or unsupported: the claim that the cut cane is stored at a site and transported by a storage truck is not shown, while the two harvesting methods—mechanical and manual—are omitted. The overview also lists some stages without clearly summarising the process’s overall progression. Including the harvesting alternatives and avoiding invented details would make the coverage more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a generally logical sequence, with an introduction and overview followed by the early and later stages of production. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “After that,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the process. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and a few links are faulty or unclear. For example, “Where, including main steps…” is an incomplete and confusing connection to the overview, while “Followed the filtration step” does not form a clear transition. The harvesting sentence also combines several ideas in a way that interrupts the process sequence. Use complete linking clauses and keep each stage’s information together; this would make the progression smoother and references easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge.” These terms are relevant and help communicate the stages. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “separated from syrup.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, however: “process chart” is less suitable for a process diagram, “store at a site called” is unclear, and “making juice from down side” is awkward. “Sugar cane” and “sugar canes” are also repeated frequently. Choose more natural process verbs and precise nouns, and vary references where possible, while retaining the accurate technical terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex forms, and the sequence is usually understandable. However, sentence control is inconsistent, with several faulty constructions and verb forms. “Where, including main steps…” is a fragment, and “Followed by harvesting” and “Followed the filtration step” are not complete clauses. In “the juice will be purify,” the verb form is incorrect; “the juice will be purified” is needed. The sentence beginning “Finally, after separating sugar crystals…” also lacks a main verb. There are further problems with articles and agreement, as in “the step is crushing” and “drying and cooling step.” Practise writing complete clauses and checking passive forms, articles and singular/plural agreement; clearer control would make the process easier to read.

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