Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Although, many people believe that in upcoming years, people will not be able to shop anything by using cash. I think in a favor for this and agree to the given statement. I will put my thoughts in the following paragraph.

Out of all the arguments the strongest one to prove my view is nowadays everyone get their salaries directly in their back account as compared to getting in cash. A good example for this is, in Canada there is a SIN number to every person who is working and reason for this is that their salaries will get directly deposited into their account. Besides this, it is also true that online payment methods are more convenient. Furthermore, it is the safest way too for using it in more crowed places and get safe from being get theft.

Another important point to consider is that using cash for purchasing will be the least using method. Also, people get rewards for using different cards and which will benefit them while doing any purchases. Some people may be unhappy with this situation because they maybe running some business or doing some random jobs in which they usually get paid in cash. And as a cash is the only source of payment so it will be difficult for them to survive in future.

In conclusion, although some believe that cash is the safest option due to the increase of cyber crime. I believe that by the new technologies and benefit of using different method of paying instead of cash will be the only method of paying.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the likelihood of a cashless society and the reasons why some people might be reluctant to adopt it. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding SIN numbers in Canada is a bit tangential to the core issue of digital payments. The explanation of why people might be unhappy is also brief and lacks depth. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more detailed reasoning or specific, illustrative examples that directly support your claims. The position is clear, but the overall development of the argument needs more substance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Out of all the arguments the strongest one to prove my view is...' and 'Besides this, it is also true that...'. There are also some issues with referencing; for example, the phrase 'and which will benefit them' is grammatically disconnected from the previous clause. While the progression of ideas is generally logical, the transitions between sentences could be smoother and more varied to improve the flow of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'get their salaries', 'get safe', and 'get theft', which is repetitive and imprecise. There are also some word-choice errors, such as 'back account' (instead of bank account) and 'least using method' (instead of least used method). To improve, you should aim to use more sophisticated collocations and avoid repeating the same verbs. Expanding your range to include topic-specific vocabulary related to finance and technology would significantly enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Although, many people believe that in upcoming years, people will not be able to shop anything by using cash' (incorrect punctuation and phrasing) and 'as a cash is the only source' (incorrect article usage). There are also issues with verb forms, such as 'get theft' instead of 'becoming a victim of theft'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.

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