Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Day by day , the global are becoming more progressive by the morden technology . i estimated that , in future we will not no longer use a cash for shopping and necessities.

As a my perspective, This is true statement for one day the both ages groups young youth as well as senior citizens will use card payment . There are many reasons behind my opinion .The main cause is that nowadays, we can observe that the many sectors only accepted card payment . For example online shopping platforms Temu , amazon, shein . Also many supermarkets only accepted card payments cause of development technology which preserve time and money . they doesn’t need to hired workers. These are save more money and profit .

In additional , Today youngsters prefer to use online phones and card payments. they can easily book their train and flights tickets by card . they does not neeed to go airport or railway station . cash carry make them fear about threft cause using of public transportation . card easily carry rather than money. The some reason is that receive a lot of discounts by card payments . for explaining, while we use some bank debit cards to book flights tickets got 5000 to 7000 discount that can’t got via cash. recent days all things become online so we need card for payment.

in conclusion, My point of view we can predictions the people will prefer use card the main factor advances technology . they have no choice to accept this fact . This is the effective way by the government to control on black money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the future of cash and the reasons for resistance. However, the development is inconsistent. While you mention online shopping and discounts, the explanation regarding why people might be unhappy to give up cash is largely missing, as you focus more on why cards are convenient. The argument is somewhat repetitive, and the conclusion introduces a new point about 'black money' that was not previously discussed. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect of the prompt and provides deeper analysis rather than listing examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate (e.g., 'In additional', 'The some reason is that'). There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, and some transitions feel forced. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where 'they' is used without a clear antecedent. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the ideas connect more naturally and improve the overall flow of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'morden technology', 'cash carry', and 'preserve time'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations (e.g., 'estimated' instead of 'predict', 'accepted' instead of 'accept'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated or topic-specific vocabulary limits the score. Expanding your range to include more academic collocations and synonyms would significantly enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('they doesn’t need', 'they does not neeed'), article usage ('the global', 'a cash'), and tense consistency. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often marred by errors, such as 'that can’t got via cash'. The punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading to eliminate these recurring errors in agreement and verb forms.

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