Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter:
- say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party
- explain why you won't be able to attend the party
- give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Collins,
How are you? I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter after knowing that you guys are throwing a huge party for Chris on his birthday. I am so glad to hear that and thankful to you for inviting into this celebration.
Well, I am really appreciate this idea as Chris will definiately enjoy this party. Since i know him very well, he has always been intersted for atttending adult parties. Now he always mention to me about the excitements of joining parties as he has a great interest in dance, he will indubitably take part in dance in hiss party.
Anyways, I was extremely waiting for his birthday to join family gathering, unfortunately i would fail to arrive in the party. Actually, on the day of this birthday, My mother has an appointment with doctor which we got after waiting so long. Honestly, my mother has eye surgery which is essential for her. Therefore, it would be very crucial to stay with her during surgery . I hope you will understand my situation and apologise my for not visiting in your special event.
However, i would like to meet him so eagarly, so I am planning to see him very son. It would be appropriate if get together on u the upcoming Diwali festival. There would be a small event in my house to celebrate diwali so i would like to seem him there. I also inviting you to come there and enjoy great time together.
I hope you will consider my apology for not coming in your party and also hoping for meeting very soon. Happy birthday and lots of love to him in advance from me .Thank you very much.
Yours sincerely,
Rimmi.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0
You address all three points clearly: you explain that Chris enjoys parties and dancing, give your mother’s eye surgery as the reason you cannot attend, and suggest meeting at your Diwali gathering. The reason for missing the party is specific and supported, and the alternative plan includes an invitation to Chris’s parents as well. This gives the letter a clear purpose and keeps it relevant throughout. To make the ideas more fully developed, explain a little more about why the surprise itself would appeal to Chris, rather than relying mainly on his general interest in parties and dancing. Also make the proposed meeting time more precise—for example, name a date or say when you will confirm the arrangements. Overall, the required information is communicated effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The letter has a clear overall progression: you respond to the invitation, explain your absence, propose another meeting, and close with birthday wishes. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Since,” “Therefore,” and “However” guide the reader through your points. The sequence is logical, but some transitions feel mechanical or are used in ways that do not quite fit, such as “Anyways” before explaining your inability to attend. There is also repetition in the closing, where you again apologise and mention hoping to meet soon. To strengthen cohesion, use fewer formulaic connectors, make references and transitions more natural, and avoid repeating information already given.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use a range of vocabulary relevant to the occasion, including “surprise party,” “family gathering,” “eye surgery,” and “Diwali festival.” Some choices also show an attempt to express enthusiasm, such as “indubitably” and “appropriate.” However, several spelling errors and unnatural word combinations make the language less precise: “definiately,” “intersted,” and “eagarly” are misspelled, while “interested for attending” and “take part in dance” are awkward collocations. “Adult parties” may also give a different impression from the intended meaning. Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than unusually formal words, and proofread spelling carefully. A more controlled choice of everyday expressions would make your warm tone clearer and more fluent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including explanations with “Since” and “Therefore,” and the reader can generally follow your meaning. However, errors occur across verb forms, sentence construction, articles, and prepositions. For example, “I am really appreciate this idea” should be “I really appreciate this idea,” and “I would fail to arrive in the party” needs a more suitable construction such as “I won’t be able to attend the party.” The sentence “It would be appropriate if get together” is missing a subject and a verb form. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “i” and the spacing before full stops. Practise checking each sentence for a complete subject and verb, then review tense and article use.
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