Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter:
- say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party
- explain why you won't be able to attend the party
- give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Dave,
I hope this letter finds you well , First of all I would like to mention that i am very happy that Bob has completed his 25 years with joy and finally he is turning in to his 26 which would be the most important stage of his career path .
I am writing to you because this idea for arranging surprise party for him might be the joyful moment for him and he will love this party as i know him on the top of that he loves you so much anything you guys do for him he always appreciate towards both of you.
I am really sorry , due to my abroad project that i have been working over the 6 months and i am leading that project so i have to be at Dubai on 25 Th of December on his birthday , so i won't be able to attend his birthday party .
As you may know, he is my best friend and he always wanted a PS 5 so this birthday i have sent present for him that will be arrive on 24 Th December Wednesday afternoon around 3 i hope he will be happy to receive that gift that he always wanted , and i will also come there to visit him after i will be done with this huge project
Yours lovingly,
Nathan
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You explained why Chris would enjoy the party, provided a reason for your absence, and suggested a plan to meet him later. However, the tone is slightly inconsistent. While you are writing to parents, the language used to describe Chris's birthday (e.g., 'turning in to his 26') is a bit awkward and informal. Additionally, the prompt asks you to write to 'Chris's parents' (Mr. and Mrs. Collins), but you addressed the letter to 'Mr. and Mrs. Dave'. Ensure you follow the specific names provided in the prompt to maintain task focus.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'I am writing to you because', and 'As you may know'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and some sentences are overly long and run-on, such as the final paragraph. Using more varied transition words and breaking up long, complex sentences would improve the overall logical progression and readability of your letter.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'career path', 'appreciate', and 'abroad project'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'turning in to his 26' instead of 'turning 26' and 'that will be arrive' instead of 'that will arrive'. Some phrasing is slightly unnatural, which limits the score. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for a formal or semi-formal letter to parents.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with punctuation, capitalization, and verb tense consistency (e.g., 'i am very happy', '25 Th of December', 'that will be arrive'). The lack of proper capitalization for 'I' and the inconsistent use of commas and periods hinder the clarity of your writing. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and punctuation.
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