Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter:

• say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party
• explain why you won't be able to attend the party
• give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr and Mrs Harlyo,

I am writing this letter about next month surprise birthday party. I am lucky

you are invite me.

I think Chris will enjoy this party, because last week I call all my school friends

they told me we will enjoy this party after we meet long lasting. I know

you will be arrange party Chris taste such as junk food, music and drink.

I won't be able to attend the party, actulay I can't attend this party because this week

I go to out off country. I do work in company so my manager told me next week some employes permossion. It is very need me. I live two months out off country. It is very far away this country.

I give details of a plan to see Chris several time, I will came in November month

so, we will meet 23rd date at 4pm in your house. On that day we will see and

together dinner party then we will enjoy this day.

I hope you can understand my suction and we will see you few months.

Yours- sincerely,

Prabhjot kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: explaining why Chris will enjoy the party, stating why you cannot attend, and proposing an alternative meeting time. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation regarding your work trip is slightly unclear and repetitive. To improve, ensure that your reasons are explained more naturally and that the tone remains consistently appropriate for a letter to a friend's parents. While the purpose of the letter is clear, the content could be more effectively expanded to better meet the expectations of a formal-informal correspondence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For instance, phrases like 'I give details of a plan' are used as a transition, which feels unnatural. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally confusing, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between your school friends and the party arrangements is unclear. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'however') would help the flow of your ideas significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'long lasting' to describe a meeting, 'suction' instead of 'situation', and 'out off country' instead of 'abroad' or 'overseas'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that you use words in their correct context. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and verbs will also help you express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

Your writing contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your message. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('I call all my school friends'), missing articles, and sentence structure errors ('It is very need me'). There is a limited range of complex structures, and the attempts made are often faulty. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions. Proofreading your work for simple errors like 'employes' (employees) and 'permossion' (permission) would also be beneficial to ensure your writing is more professional.

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