Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter:
- say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party
- explain why you won't be able to attend the party
- give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,
I hope are doing well, I just wanted to late you know that I am so rorry for the incovience but I'm not able to attend the Chris birthday surprise party.
I am really excited for the party of my beloved best friend Chrish, because I already had a very important business meeting in London that day so I can't make it to that day. However, I'm going to parcel the Chrish favourite gujrati sweet today as birthday gift from me so he reaaly gone love that , Moreover, I just talked with the our frinds group and they are coming to your house to give chrish suprise birthday gift.
I am also coming back on that weekend, so after coming to India I am planning to come to your house on the monday morning to meet him before he went back to Australi. Don't forget to wish him "Happy birthday from me". Sorry for the inconviences, See you soon.
Best regards,
Hiren
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining why Chris will enjoy the party, stating your inability to attend, and proposing an alternative meeting time. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, you mention why Chris will enjoy the party, but the explanation is brief. Additionally, the tone is slightly inconsistent for a letter to a friend's parents, as it feels a bit informal and rushed. To improve, ensure you expand on your ideas with more detail and maintain a polite, respectful tone throughout the correspondence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors, such as the comma splice in the first sentence ('I hope are doing well, I just wanted...'). The transition between the reason for your absence and the alternative plan is clear, but the overall structure could be improved by using more varied linking words and ensuring that sentences are connected more smoothly to enhance the logical progression of your message.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some specific terms like 'parcel' and 'business meeting'. However, there are several spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'rorry' (sorry), 'incovience' (inconvenience), 'Chrish' (Chris), and 'frinds' (friends). These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. To reach a higher band, you should focus on accuracy in spelling and word choice, and try to incorporate a slightly wider range of vocabulary to express your thoughts more precisely and naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. Examples include 'I hope are doing well' (missing subject), 'I already had a very important business meeting... so I can't make it' (tense inconsistency), and 'before he went back' (should be 'goes'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses will significantly improve your grammatical accuracy.
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