Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter:

• say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party
• explain why you won't be able to attend the party
• give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear mr and Mrs Collins,

I writing to reply your letter that I received last last Sunday, about giving the surprise part to Chris on his birthday.

I strongly belive that Chris will enjoy this party because he love to get special attention from everyone. Firstly, I was happy to know that you got Apple 17 promax for him that he also want to buy it so after seeing that he would be elated. Secondly, you invite our all friends those would ultimately feel him special and happy.

I appologize that I cannot attend the party, as on this day I have to admit to my father in hospital for his heart opperation. There is no one in our family to takecare of his.

I would like to mentioned that I have 2 weeks holidays from my college and I can also get vocational leave from my work, therefore I am planning to spend time with the Chris on these day.

I look forward to your reply.Thank you for your time and consideration.

your Faithfully,

name

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points in the task: you explain that Chris enjoys attention and would be pleased with the phone, give a clear reason for missing the party, and propose spending time together during your college holiday. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. The explanation of the party’s appeal is the strongest part, while the alternative plan is less fully developed: “spend time with the Chris on these day” does not specify when or what you might do. To make the response more complete, suggest a particular date or activity and clarify the leave arrangements. The apology and closing also suit a personal letter, though the sign-off could be more appropriately phrased for the recipients’ names.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: it opens by referring to the invitation, explains why Chris will enjoy the party, gives your reason for declining, and ends with a future plan. Paragraphing helps distinguish these main points, and sequencing words such as “Firstly” and “Secondly” make the supporting reasons easy to follow. Some connections are less smooth or precise, however. For example, “those would ultimately feel him special” makes the relationship between the friends and Chris unclear, and “therefore” joins the holiday and work-leave details to the plan without clearly showing how they fit together. The closing sentence also runs directly into “Thank you.” Use clearer references and more natural transitions to make the progression feel less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the purpose, including “surprise party,” “special attention,” “elated,” “heart operation,” and “vocational leave.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and “elated” adds some variety beyond basic descriptions of happiness. There are also several spelling and word-choice errors, such as “belive,” “appologize,” and “opperation,” as well as awkward expressions like “admit to my father in hospital” and “takecare of his.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding the message, but they reduce accuracy and naturalness. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for hospital care, invitations, and making plans; this would make your vocabulary more precise and appropriate to a friendly letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including a reason clause with “because” and a longer sentence beginning “I would like to mentioned that…”. The main message remains understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur often enough to limit control. Examples include “I writing to reply your letter,” “he love,” “I would like to mentioned,” and “I have to admit to my father in hospital.” The final plan sentence also has an unclear time reference. Practise forming complete clauses and checking subject–verb agreement and verb patterns: for example, use “I am writing in reply to your letter,” “he loves,” and “I would like to mention.” More accurate control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to read.

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