Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter:
- say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party
- explain why you won't be able to attend the party
- give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
i am writng this letter to bring your attentiom.i blieve this matter is improtant and needs your attention.
first of all ,i would like to explain that cheri really enjoy this surprise this party without me .moreover i won't to join this because my exam start ame this datesafter.i try to after exam i arrange samme surprise for him . therefore it is important to take suitable steps to improve this situtation.
i would to like request you to look into this matter and take necarssery action as soon as possible.i believe that your support nd occopation can help solve this problem. i would also apperciate it if you can consider my suggestion nd take some possitive streps.
i hope your understand my soncern and respond favourably.thank you for time and confidration.
your faithfull
rb
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You make a basic attempt to address the three requested points: you say Chris may enjoy a surprise, explain that exams prevent you from attending, and mention arranging another surprise after the exams. However, the reasons and alternative plan are very unclear and minimally developed. For example, “my exam start ame this datesafter” does not clearly explain when you are unavailable, and “i try to after exam i arrange samme surprise” gives no specific time or plan to meet Chris. Much of the letter instead asks the parents to “take suitable steps” and “take necarssery action,” which is unrelated to the invitation. The response is also 15 words below the required minimum. Address each bullet directly, add relevant details, and use an appropriate closing to complete the letter.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is a basic sequence, signalled by “first of all,” “moreover,” and “therefore,” and the reader can identify an attempt to discuss the party, your absence, and a later arrangement. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the letter shifts from the invitation to an unrelated request for the parents to “take suitable steps” and “look into this matter.” Several linking expressions are used mechanically or do not show a logical relationship. The response is also presented as one continuous block, making its parts difficult to distinguish. Organise it into short paragraphs—one for appreciation and Chris’s likely reaction, one for your apology and reason, and one for a specific alternative plan—and use transitions that accurately connect those ideas.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems sometimes make the message difficult to understand. For instance, “improtant,” “necassery,” and “apperciate” are misspelled, while “take suitable steps” and “take necarssery action” sound like language for a formal complaint rather than a friendly letter about a birthday. “surprise this party” is also an unclear phrase. You do attempt some formal expressions, such as “respond favourably,” but they are not appropriate to the situation. Choose natural, task-specific language—for example, say you are “sorry to miss the celebration” and suggest “meeting for lunch after my exams”—and check spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response relies mainly on simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to join ideas using “because,” “moreover,” and “therefore.” Frequent errors in sentence structure and verb forms make several sentences hard to follow. For example, “cheri really enjoy this surprise this party” has an unclear structure and incorrect verb agreement, while “my exam start ame this datesafter” does not form a clear grammatical clause. The sentence about arranging something after the exam also lacks a clear subject and verb sequence. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including the lowercase opening “i” and missing spaces after commas. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check tense, agreement, and punctuation.
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