Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In modern era, fitness has become a fashion. The reason is that almost everyone is using social media. Those who got some followers, they want to look fit, attractive and role model to audience. To meet such results, majority of people prefer personal trainers rather going for sports or doing excercise. Moreover, fitness trainers, nuitrionist they make vlogs, blogs and discuss fitness related subject on their channel. This attracts fitness consious audience to approach them where they tell them about their personal fitness packages which are tailored to their needs to look young.

This has positive as well as negative impact on society.

Positively, a fitness trainer or nutrionist will prepare a plan for his or her client based on their requirements. A dedicated personal trainer will be with you in your fitness journey. He or she will be monitoring progress you make on daily basis. That will ensure deaires outcomes.

On contrary avoiding support and exercise taking people wellbeing away.

A friend of mine

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify a plausible reason for the trend—social media encourages people to look attractive and promotes trainers’ services—and you indicate that the development has both positive and negative effects. However, the task is addressed only partially: the reasons are briefly stated, the positive side receives limited explanation, and the negative side is not developed. The sentence “On contrary avoiding support and exercise taking people wellbeing away” is unclear and does not explain how relying on a trainer is harmful. “A friend of mine” appears to begin an example, but the response ends before it is completed. The response is also 85 words below the required minimum. To improve, explain both sides fully, give a clear overall judgement, and support it with a complete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening discusses reasons, followed by a sentence introducing positive and negative effects, and then a paragraph on benefits. Linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “Positively” help signal these shifts. However, the progression is incomplete: the negative point is compressed into one unclear sentence, and “A friend of mine” is left unfinished, so the ending does not provide a conclusion. Some connections between ideas are also difficult to follow, particularly the move from social-media promotion to people choosing personal trainers. Use separate, fully developed paragraphs for reasons, advantages, disadvantages, and your conclusion, with clear links between each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “personal trainers,” “tailored to their needs,” “monitoring progress,” and “fitness packages.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the subject specifically rather than relying only on very basic terms. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “excercise,” “nuitrionist,” “consious,” and “deaires,” and some phrases are unnatural or unclear, such as “fitness has become a fashion” and “look young.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe fitness as “increasingly popular” and refer to “health-conscious audiences.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more extended sentences, including “A dedicated personal trainer will be with you in your fitness journey” and the sentence beginning “Moreover.” However, control is inconsistent, and several sentence structures are incomplete or faulty. For example, “Those who got some followers, they want…” has an unnecessary repeated subject, while “To meet such results, majority of people prefer personal trainers rather going…” lacks accurate article and comparison structures. The final fragments, “On contrary…” and “A friend of mine,” also prevent the ideas from forming complete sentences. Practise building complete clauses, using articles and prepositions accurately, and checking that each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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