Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In almost every country, People love to do exercise , sports , and special training to maintain fitness. Fitness is very important for overall health.It depends person to person what is feasible to them. In many countries people like sports and maintain fitness. On contrary,few want to maintain through physical exercise. Out of all, Some people hire personal trainers for their day to day activity and physical exercise.

There is no harm in doing exercise or sports by yourself. If people are confident enough to do exercise on its own. Infact It is benficial,if one can do in correct way. Sports is also a great activity for health and body overall. Those who do sports and exercise at home can cutoff major finance and time.

People also hire a personal trainer to get in shape and physically fit. It has pros and cons also. The benefit of personal fitness trainer is that they are more attentive towards you. they help you complete your fitness goals. It has a positive impact in a society. If some one is medically not fit, for example dealing eith weight gain or weight loss , heart conditions etc. A personal trainer concern about your health and trains you accordingly. If some one is affording,they must hire a trainer. I have seen my friends and close family member to get back in shape by just follw their fitness trainers

I am a doctor, I myself finding it difficult to do sports or exercise on my own. I always ask for trainer help.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both the reasons for hiring a trainer and whether this is positive, and your position is generally favourable: you say trainers provide attentive support and help people reach fitness goals. The example of people with weight or heart concerns is relevant, as is your personal experience as a doctor who finds it difficult to exercise alone. However, the reasons are only partly explained, and the discussion of whether this trend is positive or negative is brief. The opening also spends time on exercise and sport generally without clearly contrasting them with personal training. Develop specific reasons—such as tailored programmes, motivation, or safer technique—and explain any disadvantages before reaching a clear, supported judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and a broadly recognisable movement from general context to independent exercise, trainer benefits, and personal experience. However, the progression between these points is not consistently clear. The opening repeats the idea that people exercise to maintain fitness, while phrases such as “On contrary” and “Out of all” do not clearly connect the ideas that follow. The final paragraph introduces your own experience but does not explicitly link it to your overall judgement. Use each paragraph for one clear purpose, and connect the reasons and evaluation with precise transitions. Clearer referencing would also help readers understand who “they” refers to in the trainer discussion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “personal trainer,” “fitness goals,” “weight gain or weight loss,” and “heart conditions,” so the main subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are awkward or imprecise, such as “maintain through physical exercise,” “cutoff major finance,” and “a personal trainer concern about your health.” Spelling errors such as “benficial,” “eith,” and “follw” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise phrases that explain the trend, for example, “receive individual guidance” or “save money and time.” Check spelling and choose natural collocations when describing benefits and costs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences, including the example about people with medical concerns, but most structures are simple and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to follow. Examples include “It depends person to person what is feasible to them,” “If people are confident enough to do exercise on its own,” and “I myself finding it difficult,” where sentence structure, agreement, or verb forms are not controlled. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in “health.It” and “Infact It.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and tense. For instance, write “I find it difficult to exercise on my own” and “A trainer can adapt the programme to a client’s needs.”

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