Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Technological revolution has impacted the lifestyle of people all over the world. Fast-paced life and hactict work schedule cause lesser time for sports and exercises, resulting increased demand of personal fitness trainers. While some believe that regular exercises and outdoor sports are more beneficial, others may argue that personal trainer is the need of the busy lifestyle. I believe both are required in some proportion to enhance physical and mental well-being.

The cost of living has forced the families to rely on dual income, resulting more working professional in the family. At the same time, due to advancement in technology, physically challenged and repetitive jobs become automated. People are engaged in desk jobs resulting longer seating hours and screen time. Due to full time jobs, screen time and seating hours have increasing significantly for working individuals resulting lesser time for sports and exercises like walking or running.

At the same time, health awareness has also increased among youth. They started tracking their physical activities, calory intakes and fitness levels through various devises. Lesser time and financial freedom resulted in high demand for personal fitness trainers. With professional guidance, working people focus on their weaknesses and effectively improve their metal and physical health without spending time on research and experiments. Personal trainers has become a famous profession and many individuals have made their career as a fitness trainer including students and nutritionists. As more people have adopted this as a career option, it become affordable to general public. Working individual can do workouts anytime in a day as per their schedule in the gym under the supervision of an expert.

On the other hand, the regular sports and activities like football or cycling have become less popular. People spending more time in the gym or doing physical stretching at home. This prevents them to visit parks or community centers for a walk, sports, or cycling, limiting their social interaction. This is obviously not good for their mental and emotional well-being.

To conclude, while personal trainer help to improve physical health in a busy work schedule, traditional activities like sports and walk improve social interactions. Both are essential for overall well-being of the individual; hence both should be utilized to improve life and happ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have addressed all parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the rise of personal trainers and discussing whether this is a positive or negative development. Your position is clear throughout the essay. The ideas are relevant, such as the impact of sedentary desk jobs and the convenience of professional guidance. However, the development of these ideas could be more nuanced; for instance, the discussion on the negative aspects of losing social interaction through sports is a good point but could be expanded further to reach a higher band. Overall, the response is well-structured and directly answers the question.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'At the same time', 'On the other hand', and 'To conclude' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between the rise of health awareness and the demand for trainers could be more fluid. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and each paragraph has a clear central topic, which helps maintain the overall coherence of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'technological revolution', 'sedentary', and 'professional guidance'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'hactict' (spelling), 'seating hours' (should be 'sitting hours'), and 'metal and physical health' (should be 'mental'). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, some inaccuracies persist. To improve, focus on refining your collocations and ensuring that your spelling is accurate, as these minor slips prevent the vocabulary from reaching a higher, more sophisticated level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'cause lesser time' (should be 'leave less time'), 'resulting more working professional' (should be 'resulting in more working professionals'), and 'Personal trainers has become' (subject-verb agreement error). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede the overall communication of your ideas. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and articles, as well as ensuring that complex sentence structures are punctuated correctly.

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