Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in many cities, more and more public are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. what are the reasons for this. is this good and bad.

i will explaining in this topic and give you some relevant example and reasons positive side in this below.

firstly, nowadays many human being are like to focus your heath and body fitness. its provide fully energy and Relax. some people are work in different Sector like handed hard work, office work , farm work , Doctors and all.

this person like to improve you body and heath the are hiring some fitness trainers others wise join gym and yoga class.

for instant, my brother work as work from home IT HR role. he worked every day 8 hours shift. he feel like Boring and tired nevertheless, he attended gym every days and feel relax also maintain body and heath. its very help full exercise and i personally suggest to join gym class , yoga class.

Secondly, in some different countries people are thing different such as Abroad side many citizens like hiring personal trainer to came at home and gives some exercise step and gives some knowledge and eat some healthy food and avoid hotel food and oily shack. for example my uncles lives in USA last 10 years and he is 65 years old moreover, he hiring fitness trainer and she came Monday to Friday evening time 5 pm to 7 pm. she charged per hours 45$ she gives some tips and help to doing exercise step and explain full detail such as, good thing and bad this how to help you body.

summary, i my personal experience i support to both side because both are help fully but sport class its very help to people like low prices you attend gym and yoga class. moreover, personal trainer only explain and saw you some step but its price is very high

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by identifying reasons for hiring personal trainers and discussing whether it is a positive or negative development. However, the position is not consistently clear; the introduction is informal and lacks a strong thesis, and the conclusion is somewhat contradictory, stating support for 'both sides' without a definitive stance. While ideas are presented, they are often under-developed and lack depth. For instance, the discussion on why people hire trainers is limited to general statements about health, and the evaluation of the trend lacks a balanced analysis of the implications. The response meets the basic requirements but lacks the depth and clear focus needed for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'for instant' is misused, and the connection between sentences within paragraphs is frequently weak. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the sudden shift to personal anecdotes about a brother and an uncle without sufficient context to link them to the broader argument. The overall structure is present but lacks the logical flow and sophisticated linking required for higher bands.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'good', 'bad', 'help', and 'work'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'public' used instead of 'people', 'handed hard work' instead of 'manual labour', and 'oily shack' instead of 'oily snacks'. The student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'heath' for 'health', 'help fully' for 'helpful') hinder the clarity of the message. A wider range of vocabulary is needed to express ideas with more precision and style.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'he feel like Boring', 'he hiring fitness trainer'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with frequent misuse of commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction significantly impacts the overall quality of the writing. Greater attention to sentence structure and fundamental grammatical rules is essential.

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