Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Is if often argued, that AI is more effective which can take place of tutors in educational institutions and colleges. Although, digital tools are more effective and helpful, I strongly believe that mentors have their own importance in teaching to students, since they have more interpersonal skills.
On the one hand, there are various reasons that technical gadgets are more effective. First and foremost is, that these tools are available 24/7 which means if a human being helps at any time or anywhere, it is always there to resolve any kind of issue. Therefore, AI can be a good friend of individuals because it can give numerous options to the learners to learn and solve the problems even if they do not have anybody else in person to resolve it. Thus, an Artificial Intelligence is more rapid, more effective and efficient in any way.
On the other hand, various factors support the fact, that the place of a teacher is irreplaceable. The conspicuous one is, that, a tutor is able to make a personal interaction with the learners which will help the students to build their confidence in communication skills as well as to solve their issues easily without any conflict. In addition, mentors are able to help the children in better ways if they are stuck at any point. For instance, if student is not able to understand the problem in one way, a tutor can guide him with other better option which will suits him.
In conclusion, although, digitals tools are more effective and rapid in this sophisticated era to resolve the complex problems, nevertheless, educational tutors have more interpersonal skills which not only help students to solve the problems but also help them to build the confidence in them so that they can face their weaknesses and are able to overcome them.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks about the reasons for the rise in personal fitness trainers and whether this is a positive or negative development. However, the essay discusses the role of AI versus human tutors in education. Because the response fails to address the specific task question entirely, it cannot be assessed for task achievement regarding the prompt's requirements. While the essay is structured as an argument, it is irrelevant to the topic provided. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your ideas directly answer the specific question asked rather than writing a pre-prepared or unrelated essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. There is a clear progression of ideas, and cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'In addition', and 'In conclusion' are used effectively to link points. However, because the content is irrelevant to the prompt, the logical flow serves an off-topic argument. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the transition between the two sides of the argument is well-managed, showing a good grasp of structural requirements for an essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some attempts at more sophisticated language such as 'interpersonal skills', 'irreplaceable', and 'sophisticated era'. There are occasional errors in word choice, such as 'if human being helps' (which is awkward) and 'which will suits him' (subject-verb agreement error). While the range is sufficient to express ideas clearly, the lack of topic-specific vocabulary related to fitness or sports is a direct result of the essay being off-topic. The vocabulary is functional but lacks the precision required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include: 'Is if often argued' (incorrect word order/typo), 'First and foremost is, that' (incorrect punctuation), 'if student is not able' (missing article), and 'which will suits him' (incorrect verb form). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent and occur in both simple and complex structures. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and punctuation around subordinate clauses.
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