Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In various countries, many people are looking for personal trainer rather than choosing outside activities. The major reasons are due to their body shaping, strength and diet. This will lead to positive impact as there are no side effect of hire a personal trainer.
To begin with, more and more individual are inclined toward the physical activity .To maintain their fitness , they hire mentor to guide and take car of their eating habit. As a result, trainer will supervise your day to day intake and physical well-being. First and foremost reason behind to do such thing is because of the busy schedule. In addition, People don't have enough time to look for their body and fitness. If they appoint any expert mentor then he/she will take care of all the eating habit and workout. Thus, an individual have not been worry what to eat or drink during day .For example, to look good and to keep maintain their physic ,will lean toward personal fitness trainer.
There will lead to negative development in terms of wasting money and influence by celebrities. By following them, sometimes they end up spending more over personal trainer rather then focusing on their health. by the name of personal gym session, people always ask for more money and middle class people end up suffer more as they won't be able to afford personal session.
To conclude, playing sports or doing exercise will help boost confidence but to remain shape and physical well being personal trainer is a better choice among all but It will lead to negative development as it influence people to spend more money by seeing other.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for hiring personal trainers and the evaluation of whether this is a positive or negative development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention busy schedules and body shaping as reasons, the explanation remains superficial. The discussion on whether it is a positive or negative development is contradictory; you initially state it is positive, then argue it is negative in the third paragraph, and finally conclude it is both. To improve, ensure your position is clear and consistent throughout the essay, and provide more detailed examples to support your arguments rather than just listing points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'In addition', their usage is sometimes mechanical or incorrectly placed. The referencing is occasionally confusing, such as in the third paragraph where the link between 'wasting money' and 'influence by celebrities' is not clearly explained. To improve, focus on using transition words that accurately reflect the relationship between your ideas and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that supports your overall argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'take car of their eating habit' (take care of) and 'keep maintain their physic' (maintain their physique). You also repeat basic terms like 'personal trainer' and 'money' frequently. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms and idiomatic expressions, and pay closer attention to word forms and spelling to ensure your meaning is always clear and professional.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'an individual have not been worry'), missing articles, and incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'There will lead to negative development'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage.
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