Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In the modern world, an increasing number of people are choosing to hire a personal fitness mentor instead of taking part in sports or attending exercise classes. There can be reasons of getting personal advice or maintaining good lifestyle that is not possible without the guidance of experts. I believe this trend has both advantages and drawbacks; therefore, people must consider their own goals and strength before taking decision of hiring a personal fitness trainer.

Different individuals have their own definition of fitness. Mostly people relate fitness to staying healthy and living active lifestyle. To be precise, fitness means someone is capable of doing their daily tasks actively and can focus on their personal goals without any illness. One of the main reasons of this trend is getting better results in a short period of time. Individuals these days are occupied in their studies, work, and family responsibilities. Due to their extremely busy schedules they are not able to exercise on daily basis. Alternatively, they start observing health concerns such as obesity, diabetes, weight gain, and stress. When they are not able to take some time for participating in sports or physical activities they prefer hiring a strict mentor who can observe them while exercising and get them a scheduled plan to get better results for their fitness. In addition to this, many youngsters are not aware about what they should follow to stay fit for which they need to hire someone who can provide them personal guidance.

Hiring a personal coach can be advantageous for those who are already into fitness and lack some skills as it can provide them advanced level of knowledge and help with modern techniques in the gym so they can work on those to compete in their fitness competition. For example, a body builder need to upgrade and focus on higher level of exercises in the gym for which a strict mentor is essential. Additionally, someone who is lazy and having poor time-management skills can get benefit of a trainer to attend his class regularly and focus on target after paying joining fee. On the other side, it is not possible for those who attend normal exercise classes as they are aware that nobody is watching them when performing in the groups.

This trend has some drawbacks as people end up spending huge amount of money to get personal tutor when they do not get exceptional result at the end of the month and it leads to financial burden as well as distraction from their career goals. Therefore, I believe that people must take some time to differentiate what are the outcomes of hiring a personal trainer or exercising in a normal routine.

To conclude, although everybody has their own fitness goals, people must have clear intentions to work on healthy body and lifestyle. Hence, hiring a personal trainer rather than taking part in sport can provide them benefits as well as financial stress so they should take decision carefully.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the trend and discussing whether it is a positive or negative development. The position is clear throughout, although the development of ideas could be more nuanced. For instance, the discussion on the 'positive' aspect is somewhat limited to specific groups like bodybuilders or those with poor time management, while the 'negative' aspect focuses primarily on financial burden. To reach a higher band, you could explore broader societal implications, such as the loss of community interaction found in group sports versus the individualistic nature of personal training.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different ideas. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'In addition to this', 'For example', and 'On the other side'. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The flow between sentences is generally smooth, but there are instances where the connection between ideas could be more sophisticated to improve the overall progression of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'financial burden', 'time-management skills', and 'distraction'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'personal fitness mentor' (usually 'trainer' or 'coach') and 'get them a scheduled plan' (better as 'provide them with a structured plan'). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, some phrasing remains slightly simplistic or unnatural. Expanding your repertoire of collocations related to health and fitness would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('a body builder need to upgrade'), subject-verb agreement, and preposition usage. For example, 'Mostly people relate' should be 'Most people relate'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and refining your use of complex sentence structures will be beneficial.

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