Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Well, health is wealth so it is very important to maintain fitness to live a happy life. To look maintain in some countries people try to ignore playing different type of games and doing exercise classes related to yoga, jogging , cycling just to hire personal fitness trainer at home to guide them for everything. I considered it has a negative development and reasons behind it are explained in the upcoming paragraphs.

The first and foremost reason is wastage of money. To be more clear, when people hire personal trainers for them they waste a lot of money to guide them just for simple exercises. For example - My brother is so lazy due to this he become fatty so my parents hire a personal trainer for him to do exercise at home so every month my parents pay 500 dollars to the guidence because he makes diet timetable and force my brother to do small exercises in the backyard of the home such as yoga, jumping and cycling. Hence, I consideres it as a negative devepment. Another reason is, depend on other for own maintainess of body. To explain it more,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address both parts of the prompt—the reasons for hiring trainers and your opinion on whether it is a positive or negative development—the discussion is underdeveloped. The points regarding financial cost and dependency are introduced but lack sufficient depth or logical expansion. Because the essay is incomplete and ends abruptly, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a lower score for task response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay shows an attempt at paragraphing, but the structure is incomplete. There is a basic introduction and one body paragraph, but the essay stops mid-sentence, preventing a clear conclusion or logical progression. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, such as 'The first and foremost reason' and 'To explain it more', but the overall flow is disrupted by the lack of completion. To improve, ensure you have a clear introduction, at least two well-developed body paragraphs, and a concluding summary.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple phrasing, such as 'look maintain' (which is grammatically incorrect) and 'fatty' (which is informal and imprecise). There are also spelling errors like 'guidence' and 'devepment'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic collocations and precise terminology related to health and fitness, while ensuring accurate spelling and word choice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'I considered it has a negative development' (tense/structure error), 'depend on other for own maintainess' (missing subject/word form error), and 'he become fatty' (verb tense error). There is a limited range of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct word forms, and using a wider variety of complex sentence structures while ensuring they are error-free.

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