Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In contemporary era, physical fitness has become a part of everyone’s life because nowadays life is busy instead of doing outside as playing games they prefer to hire gym trainer for their well-being. I am partially agree with this viewpoint of view.

To start with, these days everyone is doing jobs and they have hectic schedule because of that they hire personal trainer instead of doing physical activities. No doubt, fitness guider make our daily routine for diet and workout which is not only good for physical health but also for mental health. In this way they cannot only they save their time but also stay fit as fital. On the other side, there are number of advantages of doing physical activities. in spite of taking fitness course at home. It’s better to go outside for walking, playing games( football, cricket and badminton). This will help them to stay refreshed and rejuvenated and they will feel energetic after it. People can protect their from numerous diseases by doing these exercises and yoga. Last but not least, individuals usually go outside for physical activities there they can meet different kind of people from old people they can learn about moral values, customs and traditions and culture.

In conclusion, as per my perception both point of views has a optimistic impact but according to physical activities is better than hiring fitness trainer because this cannot only save money but also help to prevent from several health hazards. With physical activities individuals can protect themselves from cancer and attack.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for hiring personal trainers and the evaluation of whether this is a positive or negative development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the reasons provided for hiring trainers are limited to 'hectic schedules', and the discussion on the benefits of outdoor activities is repetitive. While a position is stated, it lacks depth and the supporting arguments are not fully extended. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples or deeper analysis of why personal training is becoming a trend, rather than just stating it is due to busy lives.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To start with' and 'In conclusion', but they are sometimes used mechanically or incorrectly, such as 'In this way they cannot only they save their time'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between ideas feels disjointed at times. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices or non-standard collocations, such as 'fital' (likely meant 'fit'), 'fitness guider', and 'attack' (used to mean heart attack). The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is some repetition of basic terms. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations and synonyms to express your ideas more naturally and precisely, rather than relying on basic or incorrectly adapted words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'I am partially agree', 'everyone is doing jobs', and 'they cannot only they save their time'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and refining your sentence structure to reduce these persistent errors.

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