Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this morden era, people are updating themself in some super developed countries as ne advancment is coming, specially in the area of fitness some nations individuals are choosing personal trainer rather than playing outdoor games or doing workout by self, before i give my final word i would like to discuss both the prons and corns of the statment in my upcoimg paragraphs.

To set a ball rolling, in the present time due to development in some fastest growing countries people are hiring their own trainers for better workout. According, to a survey done by 'Time's of USA' around 70 persent of native says that by keeping personal trainer at gym they get motivated and do mathamateicall exercises. to make it simplify, if there is trainer than they can do workout the schedule and if they are wrong then supporter will teach them proper way. Apart from this, make a proper diet plan according to workout which helps to gain or loose the weight of the person. secondly, in develoved countries natives are rich so they can afford the trainers likely who are immigrants in basic wage.

On the flip side, there are aslo some people like me who things that instead of keeping personal trainer a person schould make their own schedule and manage by their own self. to examplify, nowadays in this advanced world everything is availabel in internet so ask in chat gtp as young school kids are doing and when the exercise appear take the refrence of youtube to learn and start doing work out, to make my point stron as per studies of old research publishe on Newyork times the Dr peshwa lump reveal that compare to gym the best exercise to put a native feets is playing sports which can out native feet mentaly abd physically.

To conclude, i strongly agree that its a negative developent to hire a personal support worker as you have option and resources availabel in marcket. But, as fifferent people have different taste so the final choise is depend on individual

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for hiring personal trainers and an opinion on whether this is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. The reasons provided (motivation, diet planning, and affordability) are relevant but lack depth. The argument regarding the negative nature of this trend is somewhat superficial, relying on the availability of internet resources rather than a nuanced discussion of the social or health implications. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments could be more thoroughly explored to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'To set a ball rolling', 'On the flip side', 'To conclude'), they are sometimes used incorrectly or sound unnatural. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas feels mechanical rather than logical. The transition between the reasons for hiring a trainer and the counter-argument is abrupt, and the concluding paragraph introduces a slightly contradictory tone by acknowledging individual choice after taking a strong stance.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains frequent errors in spelling and word choice, such as 'morden' for 'modern', 'ne advancment' for 'new advancement', and 'persent' for 'percent'. There are also issues with collocations, such as 'mathamateicall exercises' and 'put a native feets'. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the high frequency of errors and the reliance on basic, repetitive phrasing hinder the overall quality. The range is insufficient to convey complex ideas with precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the final choise is depend'), incorrect article usage, and fragmented or run-on sentences. Punctuation is often misused, particularly with commas. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are frequently inaccurate, which can cause difficulty for the reader. The control over basic grammar is inconsistent, and the errors are pervasive throughout the text, significantly impacting the clarity of the message.

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