Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many parts of world. About 75 percent of people don't want to do anything. They want a lot of rest and do a lot enjoy through using smartphones, playing games and watching movies. They don't want to do any physical activities because of the younger generation don't want to get involve because they think can get easily tired because of doing that.

The main reasons for people get hired a personal trainer because now days they want to adopt a culture from eastern countries to make sure they look absolutely fit and in fine shape. Most Important thing that professional trainer cost are very high.

For my perspective, hiring a personal fitness trainer gives you confidence because lot of people are shy, they don't know what to do so that gives them absolute chance to overcome their shyness by hired a professional trainer. The fitness trainer gives them a proper development where, they lack. The absolute benefit of getting a trainer is you can do a training for full month without getting remember because trainer strive that you can't miss a single day workout. So, your body can't get disturbed and your metabolism works perfectly.

In conclusion, the fitness trainer is used for all. So, its better to have someone who can suggest you good and proper things rather than you can do all by yourself and disturb yourself without knowing.

For example, the footballers who achieved their physic is normal but to maintain it they want a personal fitness trainer.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for hiring personal trainers and offering an opinion on whether it is a positive or negative development. However, the development of ideas is limited. The reasons provided, such as 'adopting a culture from eastern countries', are vague and lack sufficient explanation. The discussion on whether it is a positive development is also underdeveloped, relying on general statements about confidence and metabolism rather than a structured argument. The conclusion is somewhat repetitive and does not effectively synthesize the main points. To improve, you should provide more specific examples and ensure each paragraph has a clear, well-supported main idea.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices, they are frequently used incorrectly or in a mechanical way, such as 'For my perspective' or 'The absolute benefit'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logic between sentences. For instance, the transition between the reasons for hiring a trainer and the benefits of doing so is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single, coherent theme would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'get involve', 'get remember', and 'disturb yourself'. The phrase 'achieved their physic' is also incorrect in this context. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'metabolism' and 'professional trainer', the lack of precision and frequent errors in word formation hinder the clarity of your message. You should focus on learning common collocations and practicing the correct usage of verbs and nouns in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'reasons for people get hired'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary components, such as 'In many parts of world' or 'The main reasons for people get hired a personal trainer because...'. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on consistent tense usage.

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