Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In these days people are like to follow personal gym trainer rather than doing excercise and going outside to do some outdoor activities such as playing games around the world. There are distinct advantages and disadvantages of the mentioned phenomenon both of which shall be eleborated upon presentely.
On the one hand, Many people like to hire a personal fitness trainer because personal trainer can create a workout plan according to person's age and their fitness level. Apart from this, personal fitness trainer can correct mistakes and reduce the risk of injury so it is more convient than following a regular excercise. For instance,a busy student or office worker may hire a trainer because they have limited time and want a workoput designed specifically for them.
On the other hand, Some people may enjoy regualar excersise as they have free time more like the olders have much free time than youngers. Also , children love to do outdoor games and many of youngs also so they do not need to hire a trainer. Some people follow the healthy routine so they do not need to hire any trainer.
To conclude
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt by discussing reasons for hiring a personal trainer and considering whether this is positive or negative. However, the response is incomplete, stopping abruptly with 'To conclude' and failing to finish the essay or provide a proper conclusion. Furthermore, the length requirement of 250 words is not met, as the response contains only 190 words. This under-length impacts the overall development of ideas, leaving the second part of the task (positive/negative development) underdeveloped and rushed. Therefore, the task is only partially addressed, which aligns with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text demonstrates a basic organizational structure with clear transitional markers like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'. Paragraphing is attempted, though the final paragraph is incomplete. Cohesive devices are sometimes repetitive or mechanical (e.g., repeating 'personal fitness trainer' frequently). Progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, particularly in the second body paragraph where the arguments regarding older people and children lack clear connection to the main topic. Overall, the arrangement shows some logical progression but suffers from inadequate development and an unfinished ending, placing it firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate basic ideas about fitness and lifestyle choices. However, there are noticeable spelling errors (such as 'excercise', 'eleborated', 'presentely', 'convient', 'workoput', 'regualar', 'youngs') and awkward word choices like 'follow personal gym trainer'. While the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary ('fitness level', 'risk of injury'), the limited range and frequent lexical inaccuracies cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional and reason clauses ('because personal trainer can create...'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('In these days people are like to follow personal gym trainer'), incorrect verb forms ('people are like to follow'), and punctuation issues. While meaning is usually retrievable despite these errors, the high frequency of basic grammatical inaccuracies prevents the text from reaching a higher band, making Band 5 an appropriate evaluation.
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