Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In modern technology, individuals are trying to take one on one tutor instead of partispting in group or doing gym in many countries. This trend happen only because of hectic lifestyle, due to that people are becoming more introvert.
one major key fact is that because of hiring personal fitness trainer one can manage their busy work schadule.
Moreover, some visitors do not like to be a socialise, doing fitness activity enhance their motive to go extra miles. To illustrate this, a person is shy to do anykind of exercise, who only feel safe when he is doing workout alone. So hiring a personal trainer give them sence of security as well as motivate them.Hence, they hire tutor who can train them to make their lifestyle healthy. Because of that, they do not take interest in public sport and join classes.
It has a nagetive effect on individual because of that they can be less interactive, loss part of being in a group or activities they enjoy with each other. However, personal tutoe is expensive, they have to spend more money on them rathar than public classes.
overall, although personal tutore give sence of secutiry, one should learn to be a part of team and playing sports in group.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding the reasons for hiring a personal trainer and whether this is a positive or negative development. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting examples. Furthermore, the response suffers from a significant under-length penalty, containing only 209 words, which falls well short of the mandatory 250-word minimum. While the writer touches on a hectic lifestyle and social anxiety as reasons, and mentions negative effects like loss of social interaction and high costs, the development remains superficial. These combined shortcomings limit the task achievement score to a band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the overall progression is somewhat disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'To illustrate this', others are misused or mechanical, leading to awkward transitions between sentences. For example, sentences like 'Hence, they hire tutor who can train them to make their lifestyle healthy' lack smooth logical flow from the preceding thought. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is erratic, creating an overall impression of a band 5.0 in coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word choice errors throughout the text. Examples include 'partispting' instead of participating, 'schadule' instead of schedule, 'nagetive' instead of negative, and 'tutoe' instead of tutor. The student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'fitness activity' and 'personal fitness trainer', but the frequent inaccuracies in spelling and word collocation noticeably impede readability in places, aligning the response with the descriptors for band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('This trend happen only because', 'a person is shy... who only feel safe') and missing plural markers or articles. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also weak, with run-on phrasing and awkward syntax evident in sentences like 'To illustrate this, a person is shy to do anykind of exercise, who only feel safe when he is doing workout alone.' These frequent errors place the grammar firmly at a band 5.0.
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