Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this era, most of people don't want to wait for their goals. They want everything with snap of fingure. There are more cons for this, but i will go with pros.

To start with merits, according to me hiring prsonal trainer give's a person more healthy life style. For example, trainer can take care of nutrients what you need in daily life better than you and how much excersise your body needed per day. Person's own coach help to improve strength of yours muscles with any egle eyes on you. As, people don't know how to do excersise properly and they could injured their self.

Now it time to share cons of hiring personal traines. people could be break their connection from their society members, if they start training in their houses and personal classes. Because they leave playing in the ground and stop talking with their society members and somwhere this thing make presure on people brain's. As well as, people will lose their interest in sports, if they keep dening playing sport or going in ground.

To conculed it, Both things have pros and cons on their sides. we can't force anyone to play in the ground every time and for personal trainer, as i discussed about my hand is on pro side. I would love to keep trainer for my self and would love to play in ground twice in week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the reasons for hiring a personal trainer and giving an opinion on whether this is a positive or negative development. However, the ideas remain somewhat limited and under-developed, relying on simple assertions rather than fully extended arguments. Furthermore, the length requirement has NOT been met; the response contains only 235 words, falling short of the 250-word minimum. This under-length impacts the overall fullness of the response, keeping the task achievement score at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some overall organization with recognizable introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs. However, progression is frequently disrupted by informal transitions and mechanical cohesive devices like 'To start with merits' and 'Now it time to share cons'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logic of sentences within paragraphs is sometimes faulty, such as abrupt shifts between ideas about nutrition, injuries, and socialization. Referencing is also occasionally unclear. This performance aligns best with the Band 5 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling throughout the text, such as 'fingure' instead of 'finger', 'prsonal' instead of 'personal', and 'conculed' instead of 'conclude'. While the student attempts some less common terms like 'nutrients' and 'lifestyle', frequent inaccuracies and restricted range constrain the lexical score to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences. Attempts at complex sentences often result in noticeable errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('trainer give's a person') and missing articles or prepositions ('with any egle eyes on you', 'could be break'). Punctuation and grammatical errors are frequent and can cause occasional difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5 criteria.

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