Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Nowadays people are more focused towards gym rather than opting any sport or exercise classes to keep themself fit. Due to which they are hiring fitness coaches which would help them to achieve their fitness goal. Hiring a fitness instructor could have multiple reasons depending on different factors like health condition, time available, physical injury and many more. I personally think having a personal fitness trainer is a good idea as this will help you to stay fit and healthy.

Firstly, when you hire someone with whom you can have one on one training sessions and use his knowledge and experience to accomplish your fitness goal that his a big plus point. Such individual can help you to work on the areas in which you are week or the areas which needs more training. They can provide you with special diet chart as per your health. Moreover such coaches will train you better while keeping your physical limitations into consideration. For example my friend Sam who wants to loose 10 pound of his weight for his sister wedding hired a certified trainer. He made special diet and set of exercise for him which helped him a reach his goal in just 30 days.

On the other hand, sports and exercise classes are also beneficial but only for those who have enough time to spend to field and change their schedule as per the classes. Furthermore every individual cannot play sports because of their physical limitations specially heart patience. Exercise class is a group activity. You have to do what the whole group is doing. No special workout is made just for you.

To conclude, having a knowledgebale certified instructor will help you to stay fit and live a healthy life. People moving with this approach of have a personal trainer are making effective use of their money and living a good life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing the reasons for hiring a personal trainer and giving a clear personal opinion on whether this is a positive or negative development. The position is maintained throughout the essay. Ideas are extended and supported, such as when the writer explains how personal trainers tailor diets and exercise regimens to individual physical limitations and goals, supported by the example of a friend named Sam. However, some arguments lack deeper elaboration, and the discussion on sports and exercise classes is somewhat generalised. These minor limitations place the response firmly at Band 6.5, rounded to 7.0 for fully addressing all prompt requirements with a clear position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay presents a clear logical organisation and progression throughout. Information and ideas are generally coherent, and the writer makes use of cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate introduction, main body points regarding trainers versus classes, and the conclusion. However, occasional mechanical referencing and awkward transitional links prevent the essay from reaching higher bands. For example, the sentence 'Due to which they are hiring...' creates a fragmented cohesive tie. Overall, the logical flow is easy to follow, supporting a Band 6.0 descriptor profile.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'physical limitations', 'certified instructor', and 'diet chart'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the response, such as writing 'themself' instead of 'themselves', 'week' instead of 'weak', 'loose' instead of 'lose', 'patience' instead of 'patients', and 'knowledgebale'. While these errors do not severely impede communication, they reflect the constraints of Band 6, where lexical control is sufficient for the task but accuracy remains inconsistent when attempting more complex phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating attempts at subordination and relative clauses. There are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors, such as missing articles ('for his sister wedding' instead of 'for his sister's wedding'), incorrect preposition usage ('spend to field'), and sentence fragments ('Due to which they are hiring fitness coaches which would help them...'). Although these errors are noticeable and require occasional rereading by the reader, they rarely impede overall communication. This performance aligns well with the Band 6 descriptors for grammatical range and accuracy.

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