Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is commonly seen that most of people prefer to do job as a personal fitness trainer as comared to play games and do exercise classes. I think that personal attention and busy lifestyle create this situation which will explain in fortcoming paragraphs along with my view toward postive development.

There are numerous causes people move to do job of personal trainer. First and foremost is personal attention. People can easily pay focus to teach about the not only importance of

doing exercise but also different ways with simple methods of doing various exercise. they can create exercise plan according to people's age, body and goals. As a result, individuals can recieve mpore benefits by taking personal attention of trainer. In addition, they have hectic schedule and busy in their personal life and their other works also. Therfore, they can set their time according to their own work which would useful for them to overcome stress and easily do another work with this job. For example, a surver was conducted that almost 80% trainers do another job along with this work due to flexibility time. Hence, they earn more money and easy survive in society.

On the other side, although its has negative but its positive development cannot be overlooked. First of all, people who learn exercise can get some advantageous fromtrainer as trainer pay more focus on the performance of the customer they doing well or not. Apart from this, they can do exercise under the safety and rules which make them confident to do exercise with technical equipments with the help of training at home.Thus they confident. Moreover, peolpe can not wait in long queue for hire trainer and also cannot waste time for making appointments that become disciplined to individuals. For instance, people do not meet time for appointment owing to huge appointments so thsy have waited for long time like in months for taking training. Consequently, they wate their time to stand in line and take date of appointments.

In conclusion, according to my opinion paying proper focus to teach exerxise's ways amd manage their time according to their owmn schedule which makes it positive development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for hiring a personal fitness trainer and whether this is a positive or negative development. The writer presents a clear position throughout, suggesting that the trend is a positive development driven by the need for personalised attention and flexibility in hectic modern lifestyles. However, the development of ideas is sometimes limited and repetitive. For instance, the explanation of why people hire trainers often loops back to individual focus without fully expanding on broader societal shifts. Examples provided, such as the survey stat about trainers having flexible schedules, are somewhat generalised. Therefore, the response aligns best with Band 6, as it addresses all parts of the task with relevant ideas, though some areas remain under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing used to separate the introduction, the reasons, the evaluation of positiveness/negativeness, and the conclusion. Logical transitions are attempted using cohesive devices such as 'First and foremost', 'In addition', 'First of all', and 'In conclusion'. However, cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical, and referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'they can create exercise plan' or 'that become disciplined to individuals'). Furthermore, some sentences lack clear logical links, and punctuation errors disrupt the flow of reading. Overall, the organizational structure is visible, but the execution of cohesive elements places this performance firmly at Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, touching upon relevant terms such as 'personal fitness trainer', 'hectic schedule', and 'flexibility time'. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, but these are frequently marred by inappropriate word choice, collocation errors, or incorrect forms (e.g., 'advantageous' instead of 'advantages', 'surver' instead of 'survey', 'wate' instead of 'waste'). Spelling and word-formation errors are noticeable throughout the text, such as 'fortcoming', 'postive', and 'exerxise's'. Despite these inaccuracies, meaning is generally conveyed, matching the descriptors for Band 5.0 where lexical control is limited and errors cause some difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating subordinating clauses ('although its has negative but its positive development...'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and article usage (e.g., 'most of people', 'as comared to play', 'which will explain', 'people who learn exercise can get some advantageous'). Run-on sentences and punctuation omissions are also prevalent, particularly in the third paragraph. These persistent errors frequently strain the reader and obscure meaning, limiting the grammatical score to a Band 5.0.

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