Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this modern era, healthy and good lifestyle is very important in order to complete everyday tasks. In some countries, most of the masses like to gym and hire personal fitness trainer instead of playing sports or doing exercise batches. There are plethora of reasons behind this development. And as per my viewpoint this is negative development. Which will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.

First and foremost reason is that busy schedule, these days people have headache schedule and they do not have time to join exercise classes because they want that make their body more fit in less time. That's the reason they hire personal fitness trainer because that person only on focus him or her. Personal fitness trainer provide proper diet plan, time and put their more efforts to train them, which is not possible by joining exercise classes.

Nevertheless, this is a negative development due to some reasons. Firstly, hiring a personal fitness trainer is really costly as compare to joining yoga classes or playing sports activities with outdoor. In this masses indirectly waste their money which they can spent join any other classes at a nominal price. Secondly, when masses playing sports they play in a team which will help to gain some skills, such as, team work, coordination, co-opration and leadership qualities and so on. Finally, particapting in sports activities are not only good for health but also good for social circle. People will get chance to meet new masses and learn about their culture and traditional. In this way, they can make good friends which will help in their thick and thin time.

Although, hiring a personal trainer for their fitness is a good way to make body fit and healthy, but it is really expansive. I personally believe that playing sports and joining exercise classes is good way to maintain healthy lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by identifying reasons for hiring a personal trainer and presenting a clear position that this is a negative development. The ideas are generally relevant, though some parts are slightly under-developed or rely on broad generalisations. For instance, the reasons provided for hiring a trainer, such as having a busy schedule and needing focused attention, are clear. Similarly, the arguments against this trend—cost and the loss of social and team-building benefits from sports—are adequately explained. However, the connection between ideas could be extended further for greater depth, placing this response comfortably at a Band 6.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt at paragraphing, separating the introduction, reasons for the trend, negative aspects, and conclusion. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical. For example, transitional phrases like 'Which will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs' are grammatically incomplete and awkward. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and cohesive devices are somewhat repetitive or misused, such as 'Nevertheless, this is a negative development due to some reasons.' Paragraph progression is generally evident, but the awkward phrasing and mechanical links restrict the score to a Band 6.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common lexical items such as 'plethora', 'coordination', and 'co-operation'. However, there are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice, collocation, and word form throughout the text. Examples include 'headache schedule' instead of hectic schedule, 'exercise batches' instead of fitness classes, and 'traditional' instead of traditions. Spelling errors like 'particapting' and 'expansive' (instead of expensive) also occur. Despite these slips, communication is not impeded, which aligns well with the Band 6.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting relative clauses and conditional structures. However, frequent grammatical errors are present, particularly with missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty sentence fragments (e.g., 'Which will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs' and 'In this masses indirectly waste their money'). Errors such as 'as compare to' instead of compared to and 'playing sports they play' show a lack of control over complex structures. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent the writing from achieving a higher band, making Band 5.0 the most accurate reflection of current grammatical control.

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