Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking.

Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter:

• say which part-time course you booked
• explain why you need to cancel your booking
• ask about booking a different course

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear mam ,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to I would like to remove my current part time course instead of I would like to book new temporary course.

I booked social studies which I would like to book off from my course. Before I was thinking it will be very interesting topic for me but then I realise I should book a course that related my academic year, helps me in my further study. I also like to know more about social gathering and social affaires, in this course I have to come for in person class and sometimes I need to go outside for project that things mentioned in my course outline.

Additionally, I am working part time job to cover my expense to I’m looking for an online or hybrid course which allows me to study from my home that’s save my lots of time. I would like to make a request to remove me from my ongoing course, and I apologise for your inconvenience.

As an alternative to I would like to book a new course which related to my background that computer science, so if you have any course available please let me know and waiting for your reply.

Regards,

Ayush

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: identifying the course, explaining the reason for cancellation, and requesting a different course. However, the tone is inconsistent and occasionally informal (e.g., 'Dear mam'). While the ideas are relevant, the expression is sometimes unclear, such as 'book off from my course,' which makes the intent slightly confusing. To improve, ensure that your language is consistently formal and that your explanations are more precise. You have successfully covered the requirements of the task, but the development of your ideas could be more polished to ensure the reader fully understands your situation without ambiguity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure of your request. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'instead of I would like to book' and 'As an alternative to I would like to book' are grammatically awkward and disrupt the flow of ideas. While there is a logical progression from the cancellation to the request for a new course, the transitions between sentences are often clunky. Using more natural linking words like 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'therefore' would improve the overall flow and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation. Phrases like 'book off from my course' and 'social affaires' (instead of 'social affairs') indicate a limited control over academic or formal vocabulary. You rely on basic phrasing, and some attempts at more complex expressions result in errors that slightly impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology related to academic administration and ensure that your collocations are accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently struggle with sentence construction, such as 'I am writing this letter to I would like to remove,' which is grammatically incorrect. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'related my academic year' (should be 'related to') and 'that’s save my lots of time' (should be 'that saves me a lot of time'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band score.

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