Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking.

Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter:

• say which part-time course you booked
• explain why you need to cancel your booking
• ask about booking a different course

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Respected Director,

Melange college.

I have booked a course lash technician in your institute.

I was very excited about it.my car got an accident.Its in workshop.It will take one or two weeks to get back.i won't be able to join this course.can you please refund my fees.I will get enrolled in nail Technician next month.I hope you will consider me. Due to road accident I am also not feeling well.

I will be thankful to you

Regards

[redacted email]

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have addressed all three bullet points—identifying the course, explaining the reason for cancellation, and asking about a different course—the ideas are severely underdeveloped. The letter lacks the necessary detail and formal tone required for a professional correspondence. To improve, you must expand on your points, provide more context, and ensure the letter meets the length requirement to allow for a full development of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks a clear structure and logical progression. It consists of a series of short, disjointed sentences rather than a cohesive piece of writing. There is a lack of paragraphing, and the use of cohesive devices is almost entirely absent. To improve, you should organize your ideas into clear paragraphs: an introduction stating the purpose, a body paragraph explaining the situation, and a concluding paragraph for your request. Using linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'however' would help connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'booked a course lash technician' instead of 'enrolled in the Lash Technician course' and 'my car got an accident' instead of 'I was involved in a car accident'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express your ideas with precision or appropriate formality. You should focus on learning topic-specific collocations and formal phrases suitable for business correspondence to improve your range and accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with sentence structure, punctuation, and capitalization. For example, 'Its in workshop' lacks a subject and proper punctuation, and 'I will be thankful to you' is a slightly unnatural phrasing. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the frequent errors in basic grammar and sentence boundaries make the text difficult to follow. You should practice using a variety of sentence types, including complex sentences, and pay closer attention to basic subject-verb agreement and punctuation.

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