Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking.

Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter:

• say which part-time course you booked
• explain why you need to cancel your booking
• ask about booking a different course

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir or madam,

The purpose of my writing is cancellation of my current opted part-time course of Financing studies and enrollment in Mechannical engineering technician course.

Initially, decison of choosing financing was influenced by my parents because they believe it has better future and new generation has grat success rate. In addition, my father is already working in finance sector , already succesful ,which alter my choice even though I like physics and math. After a thoughtful consideration with myself , I realised it would better to pursue own dreams than parents. I made my decison to do further studies in Mechanical.

Furthermore, I would like to know do you availibility of seat in this course for upcoming term?What would be fee structure for that and whatever the difference I will happy to pay.Provided that, after meeting all requirement kindly enroll me.

I hope this matter will recieve your utmost attention.Thanking you in advance.

Your faithfully,

Alex

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The candidate successfully covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. First, the specific course booked is clearly stated as 'Financing studies'. Second, the explanation for cancellation is provided, detailing family influence and a personal realization to pursue Mechanical engineering instead. Third, the letter asks about booking a different course and handling fee differences. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a college administrator. However, some ideas are slightly repetitive or under-developed, particularly the explanation regarding parental pressure. Overall, the response addresses all parts of the task satisfactorily, earning a Band 6.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into clear paragraphs, each serving a distinct function in moving the message forward. The student uses basic cohesive devices such as 'Initially', 'Furthermore', and 'Provided that', though some transitions feel slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'The purpose of my writing is cancellation'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, background, questions, and sign-off. While referencing and cohesive links are occasionally clunky, the overall arrangement is coherent and easy to follow. This performance aligns well with the Band 6 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common collocations and topic-related terms like 'part-time course', 'fee structure', and 'enrollment'. However, there are noticeable word-choice errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'current opted part-time course', 'grat success rate', and 'do you availibility of seat'. Spelling errors also occur, such as 'Mechannical' and 'recieve'. These inaccuracies show an attempt at a broader lexical range but limit the score. The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main points but contains enough flaws to sit firmly at Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The candidate attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and conditional structures. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are several missing articles and prepositions, such as 'pursue own dreams than parents' instead of 'than my parents', and awkward phrasing like 'whatever the difference I will happy to pay'. Punctuation and capitalization errors also appear around sentence boundaries and sign-offs ('Your faithfully,'). While the errors do not completely impede communication, their frequency prevents the score from rising higher. This warrants a solid Band 5.5.

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