Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking.

Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter:

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to make an booking cancel for the part-time course, which I recently joined at your college. I got admission to hospitality management, and its class schedule falls on Monday to Wednesday. Due to this schedule, I am not able to continue this course because I work on weekdays from 7 am to 3:30 pm. At a result of this, this is creating various problems for me at work and also effecting my concentration on studies. Moreover, my interest in Artificial Intelligence is comparatively higher than hospitality management. That's why I am looking for another course associated with technology and AI, so that I can pursue my career in the future in this technical field. I would like to gather information about the courses related to Artificial Intelligence, cybersecurity, and so on whose classes suit within my schedule. So, if it is possible, will you be able to provide me with more information about these courses and cancel my currently enrolled course? Yours sincerely, Komal

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response8.0
Coherence and Cohesion7.0
Lexical Resource6.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.5
Overall7.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 8.0

The letter covers all three requirements clearly: you identify the hospitality management course, explain that its Monday-to-Wednesday timetable conflicts with your weekday job, and ask about alternatives in AI and cybersecurity. The reason for cancelling is supported with relevant detail about your working hours and the effect on your studies. Your interest in a different field also makes the request for another course understandable. The purpose remains clear throughout, and the polite closing suits a letter to a college administrator. To make the response even more complete, state the cancellation request directly and separately from the request for information, and specify whether you hope to transfer your booking or make a new one. These are minor refinements to an otherwise well-developed response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a sensible progression: you introduce the cancellation, explain the timetable conflict, describe your interest in another subject, and make a final request. Paragraphing helps distinguish the main points, while phrases such as “Due to this schedule” and “Moreover” guide the reader through the reasoning. The overall organisation is clear and easy to follow. Some linking is a little repetitive or mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “this” in “At a result of this, this is creating…” and the sequence “That's why” followed by “So.” You could improve the flow by using more precise references and combining related requests into a concise final paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the purpose, including relevant terms such as “hospitality management,” “Artificial Intelligence,” “cybersecurity,” and “concentration.” These choices make the subject matter clear, and the tone is generally appropriate. There are, however, several awkward collocations and word choices that reduce naturalness: “make an booking cancel,” “got admission,” and “classes suit within my schedule.” “Effecting my concentration” is also an inaccurate choice in this context. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but more precise, conventional phrasing would make the letter sound more fluent and professional. Aim to learn useful expressions for cancelling enrolment and asking about course availability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “the part-time course, which I recently joined” and a reason clause beginning “because I work on weekdays.” Most of the message remains understandable, and you attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences. Some grammatical errors remain, however. For example, “an booking” has an article error, and “At a result of this, this is creating…” has an incorrect construction and unclear sentence structure. The final question, “if it is possible, will you be able to provide me… and cancel…?” also combines two requests in a way that makes the structure awkward. Use direct, well-formed requests and check articles and clause construction.

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