Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

"First impression is the last impression." This quote is pretty common to hear, which focuses on improving one's personality. Buying always cheap clothes can something make your personality not worth it, especially if you are working in a famous company, where you have to participate with businessman and client form another nations. In this senerio, individuals have to look professional and with inexpensive attire people can not get that professional look, which can affect individual productivity in a company. A famous designer surveyed in 2023 and found that 97 percent of the employed lost their most prominent deals because of their unprofessional attire in meetings. On the other hand, people who chose expensive clothes got the opportunities to work with international business clients because of their professional look in that same survey.

Not only would this reason be sufficient to prove my point of view, but also cheap clothes have bad-quality stuff that is unreliable, especially in special functions. Because the fibre and the other materials that are used in a piece of cloth are not long-lasting, people are getting less charged for that cloth. During an interview, when a renewed media person XYZ asked to a designer why the charges a huge amount of money for one designer dress, he answered that they used high quality materials in their dresses, which make the dress long-lasting and attreactive. clothes with low quality materials dameges vwey often which lead individuals in emberessment in special functions. This statement is given by 8 designers out of 10.

in conclusion, although expensive clothes are hard to afford sometimes, this should not be the only loosing valuable opportinities of career or making worse special occations by purchasing cheap low quality clothes. Instead of getting embarrassed in front of people or making ourselves sad after not getting select in company interview just because of inappropriate choice of clothes. individuals should invest in expensive but hight quality materialled attires.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of buying fewer, more expensive clothes. The ideas are relevant, focusing on professional image and product durability. However, the development is somewhat hindered by the use of invented statistics (e.g., '97 percent of the employed lost their most prominent deals'), which weakens the argument's credibility. While the position is consistent throughout, the supporting examples feel slightly contrived rather than based on genuine logical reasoning or real-world experience. To reach a higher band, focus on providing more realistic, well-reasoned arguments rather than relying on fabricated data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each with a central theme. There is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs and the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Not only would this reason be sufficient to prove my point of view, but also...'. Additionally, some transitions between sentences are abrupt. While the overall structure is coherent, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'this statement') is always clear and precise.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'prominent', 'unreliable', and 'embarrassment'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'dameges vwey often' (spelling/usage), 'less charged for that cloth', and 'hight quality materialled attires'. These errors occasionally distract the reader, though they do not impede overall communication. Expanding your range of collocations and focusing on accurate word forms would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the writer attempts complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'they used high quality materials'), article misuse, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'the only loosing valuable opportinities'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors throughout. The frequency of these errors suggests that the writer has not yet achieved full control over complex structures. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and ensuring that verb tenses remain consistent throughout the essay.

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