Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

To commence, the considerably the world individuals have a different choice to buy the cholthes in daily life, and go to different areas some choice expensive and majority choice a normal cholthes.

Overall, veiw of individuals is importants of colthes , the majority is not the same choice ,the rich and educated people is to buy a expensive chlothes ,on the other hand to poor socities cannot afford the expensie is to like normal and cheaper dresses.

Nowdays, the quickly moving economy to the world and new trends in fashion industries is big effect in human life,mostly people they can follow ,and the richest to take them easily ,However the other is so difficult to buy the high prizes chlothes.To instance the recant years people wears a simple and normal chlothes as in which time this not thinks.

Secoundly, in this time mostly individuals to do shooping in online they were buzy in life , everyone have on time for shooping to spends time in office and work ,althrough some people is refer to shooping going in the malls their asking of to see and choice better chlothes, and this movement is very enjoying . To illustrate in my area the people to go the bazar for the shooping and in my family choice in this way.

In conclusion the mostly individuals take a choice on online and expensive thinks ,However the majority to go the mall to their better way. In my opinon

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response touches on clothing choices, fashion trends, online shopping and shopping in malls, so it is broadly related to the topic. However, it does not clearly answer whether buying a few expensive clothes is better than buying many cheaper ones. The conclusion says people make different choices but gives no definite position, and the body paragraphs mainly describe what rich and poor people or shoppers do rather than explain the advantages or disadvantages of either option. The examples about people in your area and family are relevant starting points, but they are not developed to support an argument. The response is also six words below the required minimum. State your view directly, give reasons comparing the two choices, and extend each reason with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and signposts such as “Secoundly” and “In conclusion” show an awareness of essay structure. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not build a clear argument about the question. The opening and second paragraph repeat the idea that people have different preferences, while the later paragraphs shift between fashion trends, online shopping and malls without explaining how these points support a position. Linking words such as “However” and “To illustrate” are used, but the relationships between some sentences remain unclear. Plan one main point per paragraph, connect each example explicitly to that point, and make the conclusion summarise a consistent opinion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts vocabulary connected with the topic, including “fashion industries,” “economy,” “trends,” “afford,” and “expensive,” and it tries to vary expressions for clothing and shopping. However, frequent spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word combinations make the message harder to understand, as in “cholthes,” “high prizes chlothes,” and “the quickly moving economy to the world.” Some words are repeated, particularly “choice,” “people,” and “clothes,” and several expressions do not convey a precise meaning. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations. For example, use “clothing” or “garments” consistently, and describe prices as “high” or “expensive,” not “high prizes.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both longer sentences and basic sentence patterns, and some ideas can be understood despite the errors. However, sentence structure and grammatical control are inconsistent throughout. For example, “the majority is not the same choice” does not form a clear grammatical relationship, while “everyone have on time” has an agreement error and an unclear construction. Articles, plurals and verb forms are also often inaccurate, as in “a expensive chlothes” and “people wears.” Several sentences join multiple ideas without clear punctuation, which makes their meaning difficult to follow. Practise writing complete subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses carefully. Check agreement, articles and singular/plural forms, and use full stops to separate distinct ideas.

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