Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays people have different opinions about socializing with work collegues during evenings and weekends. Some people think its good to keep the personal and professinoal life seprate and some people think totally opposite to it and both of them are correct in their own way.

On the one hand, Person who like to get socialize with people after office creates strong connections/relationships.People spending time after office going out for a tea break or dinner communicating with each other they get to know better about each other. As a result they improve the teamwork etc. whenever in the office they are together they know each of them very well and they can help them in a very comfortable manner. Furthermore social activites also relives stress and make the envoirment stress free.

on the other side people who like to stay at home after the office and dosen't like to build connections sometimes miss out many things like the party after the office where everyone meets get to know each other personally. Insted of this they like to give their quality to time to their parents, better half. Example I am working in a bank and after my job is done at 4 pm i would love to go home rather than going out with my colllegues and i dont think so that's something is wrong in that as i ove my personal space and i love to give my time to my family as they are getting old so i need that precious moment of spending time with them because this is very cruical time if i gonna miss this time it won't come back for making connections going for a party with collegues i have enough time, I have priorities in my life and i go according to that and i don't think so that something si wrong in it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both perspectives: the first body paragraph explains how socialising can build relationships, improve teamwork and relieve stress, while the second presents the value of spending evenings with family. Your personal example about working in a bank makes your preference for family time clear, and the conclusion that people have different priorities gives the response a relevant viewpoint. However, the position is not fully consistent: the introduction says both views are correct, while the example strongly favours keeping work and personal life separate. The benefits and drawbacks are also asserted more than explained, and the second view is framed mainly as missing out rather than as a positive choice. State your own position clearly and develop each side with more balanced reasoning and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction and two body paragraphs, and signposts such as “On the one hand” and “on the other side” help readers recognise the two views. Ideas within the first paragraph generally follow a cause-and-effect sequence, moving from social contact to stronger teamwork. However, progression is uneven: the second paragraph shifts from describing people who prefer home to a long first-person explanation, with several ideas crowded into one sentence. Some links are vague or repetitive, including “As a result” and “Furthermore,” and the final point about having enough time to make connections is not clearly connected to the earlier argument. Use clearer topic sentences, divide long sections into manageable sentences, and make each paragraph develop one main line of reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “teamwork,” “stress,” “personal space,” “priorities,” and “connections.” These choices communicate the main ideas, but the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the reader pause. Examples include “get socialize,” “give their quality to time,” “relives stress,” and “cruical time.” Spelling errors such as “collegues,” “professinoal,” and “envoirment” are also noticeable. Aim to learn common collocations as complete phrases, such as “socialise with colleagues,” “spend quality time with family,” and “relieve stress.” Proofreading for spelling and choosing precise, natural expressions would make your meaning easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to use both simple and longer sentences, including cause-and-effect structures such as “As a result they improve the teamwork” and a conditional idea about missing time with family. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “Person who like” has problems with articles and subject–verb agreement, while “people ... dosen't like” does not maintain agreement. The final sentence joins many clauses with commas, making the relationships between ideas unclear. There are also inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation, such as beginning a paragraph with “on the other side.” Practise accurate sentence patterns, agreement, articles and punctuation, and split long sentences into shorter units before attempting more complex structures.

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