Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Some individuals opinion that it`s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other public think it`s crucial to keep working life completely separate from social life. I believe that many individuals want to keep professional life separate from social life because they do not want shares anything about and they are living happy life. Whereas, other people encourage that it`s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends, i feel that this is idea good but as same time the most people they wants to spending their time own family.
First, the public thinks that a better idea to socialise with workers during evening and weekends. While, they are wanting the spend their time with families because they are very busy with daily schedule.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 133 words. Because the essay is significantly under-length, it is impossible to fully develop the ideas required by the prompt. While the student attempts to address both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, the discussion is extremely superficial and lacks the necessary supporting evidence or examples. The ideas are repetitive and under-developed, preventing a clear exploration of the topic. To improve, the student must expand on their points with specific examples and ensure the essay meets the length requirement to allow for a comprehensive response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization by using 'First' to begin a paragraph, but the overall structure is severely hampered by the lack of content. Paragraphing is ineffective, with a large amount of empty space and a very short, underdeveloped second paragraph. Cohesive devices are either absent or used incorrectly, such as the awkward use of 'Whereas' and 'While' at the start of sentences. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. More effort is needed to link sentences and paragraphs using a variety of cohesive devices to create a smooth flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple words like 'good', 'idea', and 'people'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Some individuals opinion' instead of 'Some individuals are of the opinion' and 'shares anything' instead of 'share anything'. The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts the ability to express complex ideas clearly. To improve, the student should focus on learning collocations related to professional and social life and attempt to use a wider range of synonyms to avoid repetition and improve the precision of their writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Examples include 'Other public think' (incorrect noun usage), 'they wants to spending' (subject-verb agreement and verb form errors), and 'this is idea good' (incorrect word order). The sentence structures are mostly simple and contain consistent errors in tense and agreement. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which limits the grammatical range. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for these fundamental errors is essential.
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