Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

We all know that majority of the people follow up with socialism, where we are also included in it. In this essay, some people believe that to be engage with workmate during evening and at the weekend time, while others has give an importance to continue their work life entirely isolate from social life.

To initiate with, socialism give a benefit to the organisation where the people with same kind of mentality which resulted into the growth or development of an organisation with finish their targeted projects. some people who do their job due to their reference of known individual. And they make a relationship with them. After doing their job they used to prefer socialise with their colleagues during evening and weekends, either any function like wedding ceremony or birthday party. So, it gives an adverse effects on the company or organisation where they work like incompletion of work if they are on leave.

Some are interested to working separately from social life because some people are introvert type. They only have a goal to finish their job and went to home. They believe that they are not interested to unite with others. I believe that this will make them less learning and incorporation into the growth of organization. Sometimes this kind of mentality turned into boring life because it gives only work in day-to-day life.

To conclude that, I believe that both kinds of views are depends upon people and their attitude towards their working and social life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The essay addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding the benefits of socialising are somewhat disjointed, and the discussion on introversion is underdeveloped. The connection between socialising and 'incompletion of work' is not clearly explained, making the logic difficult to follow. To improve, you should provide more specific examples or clearer reasoning to support your points. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not fully summarise the main arguments presented in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often mechanical or unclear. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To initiate with' and 'To conclude that', they are sometimes used incorrectly or sound unnatural. The referencing is occasionally confusing, such as in the second paragraph where the link between 'socialism' and 'incompletion of work' lacks a clear logical transition. The progression of ideas is hindered by awkward phrasing, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow your argument smoothly throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. You frequently use words incorrectly, such as 'socialism' when you mean 'socialising' or 'social interaction'. Phrases like 'reference of known individual' and 'incorporation into the growth' are unnatural and impede clarity. There is a lack of variety in your word choice, and you rely on basic structures to convey your meaning. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on using words in their correct context and expanding your range of collocations related to the workplace and social life.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('others has give', 'views are depends'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or poorly constructed, such as 'Some people who do their job due to their reference of known individual.' While you attempt to use complex sentences, these are often faulty and contain errors that can cause some difficulty for the reader. Improving your control over basic sentence construction and verb tenses is essential for achieving a higher score.

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