Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

playing crike and many more leads to improve their relation, share their expriences to help in challeging situations,

some people just want to enjoy their holidays with their family to get rid of stress and be relxed.

In this cutting-edge era, certain section of societies are believing to spend their weekends and after shift time with their co-workers while rest of them agree with the approach of separated work-life from social life. This essay will discuss both view in the upcoming paragraph along with my opinion.

To commence with, supporters of socializing with their colleague want to improve their relation with their staff member as while working in the office, they not only usually busy with their aim of targets completion in the peek time but also have several meeting to attend which is the major reason of spending less time to chat with other. Therefore, If they go out during either evening or holidays, they can make strong bond with their co-workers while sharing the experiences with them. For instance, new workers often face adversity on their job which can be overcome with the assist of employees' past experiences while enjoying dinner with them or playing games with them.

On the other hand, some people prefer to take working life totally different from their social life. To articulate it, long week of hectic work schedules are not allowed them to spend quality time with their family. Therefore, they just want to enjoy their holidays with their family to get rid of stress and be relaxed, such as going on trip, so that they will refresh themselves to work for next days tasks.

In conclusion, both parties have their own importance and merits while socialise with co-workers leads to know each others and improve their relations as well as spending time with family make them people relex and enjoy family time. Thus, I thin

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear position, although the conclusion is incomplete, which impacts the overall development. The ideas are relevant, such as the benefits of bonding for new employees versus the need for family time to reduce stress. However, the initial paragraph contains fragmented, disconnected sentences that do not form a coherent introduction. While the main body paragraphs provide some support, the development is somewhat limited, and the abrupt ending prevents a full synthesis of the argument. To improve, ensure all parts of the essay are fully developed and that the conclusion provides a clear summary of your position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by mechanical and sometimes inaccurate use of cohesive devices. For example, the phrase 'To articulate it' is used incorrectly to introduce an explanation. The opening paragraph is particularly problematic, as it consists of disconnected phrases that lack logical progression. While there is an attempt to use transition signals like 'To commence with' and 'On the other hand', the overall structure feels disjointed. Improving the logical flow between sentences and ensuring that cohesive devices are used naturally will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary range is adequate for the task but lacks precision and contains several errors in word choice and collocation. Phrases like 'cutting-edge era' and 'certain section of societies' are slightly unnatural in this context. There are also spelling errors such as 'crike' (cricket), 'expriences', 'relex', and 'relxed'. While the meaning is generally clear, the limited range and frequent errors in spelling and collocation prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on learning collocations and proofreading for common spelling mistakes will help improve your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('certain section... are believing'), incorrect verb forms ('are not allowed them to spend'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly in the opening section. While the attempt at complex structures is evident, the lack of control over basic grammar rules results in a high frequency of errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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