Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Undoubtedly, there has been much discussion revolving around the matter of becoming more socialization at work place brings many benefits. while one section of society believe that keeping work and social life separate is best way, another school of thoughts holds a different view. In this piece of writing, I will explicate both the view points before commencing my own opinion.
Analyzing the statement and explaining further, there has been influx of advantages being sociali
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under-length, containing only 75 words compared to the 250-word minimum requirement. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The introduction attempts to set up the discussion, but the essay stops abruptly after the first sentence of the second paragraph. Because the response is incomplete, it fails to discuss both views or provide a personal opinion, which are core requirements of the prompt. This severe lack of development prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too short to demonstrate a coherent structure or the effective use of paragraphing. While there is an attempt at an introduction, the essay ends before any logical progression of ideas can be established. Cohesive devices such as 'while' and 'another school of thoughts' are used, but they are not supported by a developed argument. The abrupt ending makes it impossible to assess the overall flow or the logical sequencing of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains errors in word formation and collocation. For example, 'becoming more socialization' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'socializing more'. Similarly, 'school of thoughts' should be 'school of thought'. While the student attempts to use academic phrases like 'explicate both the view points', the range is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. The vocabulary is basic and the errors in word choice are noticeable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. The opening sentence, 'Undoubtedly, there has been much discussion revolving around the matter of becoming more socialization at work place brings many benefits', is a run-on sentence with incorrect structure. There are also missing articles, such as 'at work place' instead of 'at the workplace'. The range of structures is very limited, and the errors are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader, even in this short sample.
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