Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
There are differing views on whether hang with coworkers on your day-offs or free times is beneficial. While, many people thought, there should be a fine line between personal and professional life. This essay will explain both views in detail and also my opinion with relevant examples.
To begin with, human is a social animal. Therefore, some people always want a company to enjoy their free time with their love ones. It depend on the hobbies and similar interests. For example, if two workmates enjoying playing golf and they have day off on same day, then; there is possibility that they will spent there free time in golf playground together.
On the other hand, my people avoid to meet there work professionals outside the office because they like to keep there personal life private. Nothing is wrong with that it is just another kind of human nature. Moreover it depend on the office environment and relationship with office staff. For example, office atmosphere is toxic so a person want a gap from office vibes. Hence, avoid to meet with office people outside the workplace.
In my perspective, it depend on the situation and relationship with others. Some people like to enhance their relationships and use them for their career growth. That's why, building up relations is always fruitful and beneficial for most of the professions.
In conclusion, building up trust and become friend with office staff is always useful and gives positive results. Even, while working with coworkers, who are your friend decrease the stress of work.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt regarding socialising with colleagues versus keeping personal and professional lives separate, and it provides a clear personal opinion in the body and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For example, phrases like 'human is a social animal' and 'building up relations is always fruitful' are stated without deep extension. While the main positions are touched upon, the supporting examples are brief and slightly simplistic, such as the mention of two workmates playing golf. This places the response comfortably at Band 5.5, as it addresses the task and presents a clear position, but the ideas remain under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay has a basic organizational structure with clear paragraph breaks separating the introduction, two body viewpoints, the author's perspective, and the conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by cohesion errors and punctuation misuse, such as the semicolon usage in 'then; there is possibility'. Reference words are also occasionally confusing or inaccurate, as seen in 'my people avoid to meet there work professionals'. Paragraphing is present, but logical flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical or abrupt. Overall, the organizational framework meets the criteria for Band 5.0, where there is some organization but noticeable flaws in cohesive devices and overall progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, featuring frequent word choice and collocation errors. For instance, the student writes 'hang with coworkers on your day-offs' instead of 'hanging out with coworkers on your days off', and uses 'there' instead of 'their' and 'they're'. Other awkward phrasing includes 'work professionals' and 'office vibes'. While the vocabulary is adequate to communicate the basic arguments, the range is limited and noticeable errors in word formation and spelling cause some difficulty for the reader. This performance aligns with Band 5.0, reflecting a restricted lexicon and frequent lexical inaccuracies.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text contains a very limited range of structures and frequent grammatical errors. Simple sentence forms dominate, and attempts at complex structures frequently result in serious structural and agreement errors. Examples include 'While, many people thought, there should be a fine line', 'human is a social animal', and 'if two workmates enjoying playing golf'. Subject-verb agreement, article use, and prepositional errors are pervasive throughout the text. These errors consistently strain the reader's comprehension and indicate that control over basic grammar is inconsistent. This firmly places the grammatical performance at Band 4.5 to 5.0, reflecting limited range and frequent errors.
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