Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In contemporary day, people often meet their colleagues in weekend as well as after completing work which could be good idea, but some also believes it is better to separate social life.

The notion to socializing life is debatable, therefore as per my perspective one should not spend their valuable time with coworker out of workplace because family need some quality time which we will discuss in following paragraphs.

The main key reason is that if person stay with coworker after accompishment of work, he would not be able to spend significant time with family. Family needs support which would be given while you are not working leads to strengthen family bond. For instance, children waits for their parents to share feelings, hardships and help the wanted from them. If any of the parents would not spend necessary time with their kids then they may increases unwanted space between their relationship. However, spending time with coworker may gives vital information about the workplace like upcoming hiring and benfits.

Another important reason would be adversly affecting work stress. After completing duties if you share the time with same people it enhances work related stress. Subsiquently, individual gets metal illness. Therefore family if the essemtial part of our life because indirectly it helps us to live happily. Though coworker may help you to grow in professional life while socializing with them but nothing is more important than peronal mental health which could be affected if he remains in same type of environment.

In conclusion, people should spend their social life with family and people who are not working with them. It help you stay health and and happy with you love ones.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall opinion: you favour keeping work and social life separate, mainly to protect family time and mental health. These are relevant reasons, and the example about children wanting to share their feelings helps illustrate the family point. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the case for socialising with colleagues receives only a brief mention: it may provide information about hiring and support professional growth. This side is not explained or illustrated enough to count as a developed discussion. Your position is present, but the opening phrase “as per my perspective” and the conclusion do not fully clarify the limits of your view. Develop both perspectives more evenly and explain when colleague socialising might be beneficial.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and each body paragraph has a main focus: family time and work-related stress. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is not always clear. In the first body paragraph, the point about workplace information appears suddenly after the family example, without showing how it relates to the argument. Linking expressions such as “therefore,” “however” and “though” are used, but some connections are unclear or mechanical; for example, “Therefore family if the essential part of our life” does not clearly follow from the preceding claim. The conclusion repeats the preference but adds little synthesis. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “family bond,” “work-related stress,” “professional life” and “mental health.” These phrases show an effort to discuss both personal and workplace consequences. However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “socializing life,” “accompishment,” “metal illness,” “benfits” and “peronal.” Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “the wanted from them” and “unwanted space between their relationship.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than using more complex wording when unsure. Proofreading spelling and checking common collocations would make your ideas clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If any of the parents would not spend necessary time…” and a reason clause beginning “because.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction frequently affect clarity. For example, “some also believes” should use a plural verb, while “children waits” needs a plural verb; “it help you stay” also has an agreement error. The sentence beginning “Therefore family…” is incomplete or incorrectly joined, and “it enhances work related stress” does not clearly express the intended relationship. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each clause for a complete structure.

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