Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

some people think it's good idea to live with the work while others believe that it's important to keep personal and professional life completely separately. from my opinion both has positive or negative affects on human life.

when we see the positive then many individuals completely engaged with their profession they attached their personal and professional life however it completely make him successful and feel proud for himself/herself. many businessman and top players,actors completely spend their time in thier profession it Helps us to create or increase ideas for their future success. for instance elon musk and mark Zuckerberg and so many top businessman and players spend thir quality of time in thier business they believe in in practical or spending time for career .nevertheless it has also many negative affects in social and family relations like many of them are cannot spends their quality of time with their family and friends

we should also need to spend our time with family or friend because it create bonds between us or also improve feelings for instance when we got married with someone we need to spend our time it many individuals think only professional life is not crucial for life money is very important for living although family and relationships is also important.

in conclusion: we should spend our with our families ,relatives and friends in holidays time it creates bond and feel relaxing or enjoyment on the other hand spend some of our time in profession because it help to earn knowledge experience and ideas.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views by discussing the benefits of combining work and personal life, including career success, and the importance of spending time with family and friends. Your conclusion gives a practical position: make time for relationships while also investing in a profession. However, the discussion is only partial. The first view is developed mainly through examples of famous businesspeople and athletes, without explaining clearly how socialising with colleagues in evenings or weekends helps them. The second view is also not fully distinguished from the general value of family time. State your opinion more directly in the introduction and develop each view with a relevant explanation and example focused on socialising with colleagues and keeping work separate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, a discussion of work and personal life, and a concluding paragraph, so there is some overall organisation. Connectors such as “for instance,” “nevertheless,” and “in conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression within and between ideas is not always clear: the first body paragraph moves from career commitment to famous individuals and then to family relationships, while the next paragraph shifts quickly to marriage and the importance of money. Some linking phrases are used mechanically, and references such as “it” and “they” do not always make clear which idea or people they refer to. Give each paragraph one clear purpose, order its supporting points logically, and use more precise transitions and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “profession,” “career,” “family,” “relationships,” and “experience,” and you attempt phrases such as “quality of time” and “creates bonds.” This gives you a basic means of expressing the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. For example, “live with the work” does not naturally express combining work and social life, and “negative affects” is not the intended form for harmful consequences. Spelling errors such as “thier” and “thir” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of topic-specific expressions and check collocations, word forms, and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “although” and a concluding sentence that brings together two sides of the issue. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “both has,” “it completely make him successful,” and “many of them are cannot spends.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “it's good idea” and the long opening paragraph, where several ideas run together. These errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb patterns, and sentence punctuation, then build longer sentences from correctly formed clauses.

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