Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chat illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who took part in regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, women were dominating in all age groups except youngest one where men were clearly ahead of women. In the oldest age group competition between the genders was tough, with women were ahead with a marginal difference.

Women peak figures were observed in the 45 to 54 age group at 53.3%. The biggest gap was in 35 to 44 group where, women led with 13% point. However the least difference was noticed in 65 and above at 0.4% points. In the youngest age group15 to 24, women trailed men by 5% points.

Men were highest in 15 to 24 group with 52.8%. Whereas, the lowest proportion was seen in 35 to 44, about 39.5% and the gap was of 13% points, which was observed the highest. However marginal difference was in 65 and over.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main contrast between the sexes and give a clear overview: men lead in the youngest group, while women have higher participation in the other groups, with the smallest gap among those aged 65 and over. Several key figures are accurately selected, including the female peak of 53.3% and the male low of 39.5%. This covers the task well, and the comparisons show some precision. However, the overview overstates the youngest-group contrast as men being “clearly ahead,” and the account gives limited attention to the middle and older age groups beyond peaks and gaps. The 35–44 and 65+ comparisons are useful, but a fuller summary of the overall pattern across the age groups would make the key features more completely developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs highlighting female and male figures. This makes the information easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Whereas” help signal comparisons. Some connections are less smooth or repetitive, though. The 65-and-over gap is mentioned in both the overview and the later paragraphs, while the final sentence repeats the point without adding a figure or further comparison. “Whereas” also begins a fragment-like sentence rather than linking two complete clauses. Grouping the comparisons more systematically—for example, first describing the age trend and then the gender differences—would create clearer progression and less repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “peak figures,” “highest,” “lowest proportion,” and “marginal difference.” These choices help communicate the main comparisons, and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, some inaccurate or unnatural collocations that limit precision: “the chat illustrates” does not describe the visual correctly, “women were dominating” is awkward, and “competition between the genders was tough” is too informal for an academic report. The phrase “13% point” is also not the standard form for a difference in percentages. Aim for conventional reporting language such as “the chart compares,” “women recorded higher rates,” and “a 13-percentage-point gap.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex forms, including clauses introduced by “where” and “whereas,” and most of the intended comparisons remain understandable. Some grammatical errors recur, however. In “with women were ahead,” the construction after “with” should be a noun phrase or participle, such as “with women slightly ahead.” “Women peak figures” needs a possessive form, and “age group15 to 24” needs separation and clearer punctuation. The sentence beginning “Whereas, the lowest proportion…” is not a complete sentence, and “the gap was of 13% points” has an incorrect grammatical pattern. Check clause completeness, possessives, and punctuation when combining comparisons; these corrections would improve accuracy while preserving your range.

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