Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, the percentage of females doing regular physical activities started low but suddenly reached its peak in middle aged women. Meanwhile, men are the most active at a young age and least active in middle age as compared to women. Both of there percentages became almost the same at oldage.

From ages 15-24, men were at thier highest with 52.8% while women were slightly low with 47.7%. At ages 25-34 women took the lead and reached 48.9% as compared to men who dropped to 42.2%. At ages 35-44, the percentage of women increased again to 52.5% while it decreased in males again to 39.5%.

Furthermore in 2010, at the age group of 45-54 physical activities in women peaked with 53.3%. The percentage in men remained lower with about 43.1%. Moreover, at ages 55 to 64 which are senior ages physical activities in women were still about 53 percent while in men they were approximately 45.1 percent. Finally, both of them became almost equal at age 65 and over with 47.1% in women and 46.7% in men.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address the task with a clear overview and relevant comparisons across all six age groups. The main patterns are accurately identified: men record their highest activity among 15–24-year-olds and lowest among 35–44-year-olds, while women peak in middle age; the figures for the oldest group are also correctly described as nearly equal. Most reported values match the chart. The overview’s phrase “started low” is somewhat imprecise, since women’s rate rises from 47.7% to a peak before falling, rather than beginning at a particularly low level. To strengthen the response further, make the overall trends more precise and avoid broad labels such as “middle aged” without specifying the relevant age range.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs reporting the figures in age-group order. This makes the comparisons easy to follow, and transitions such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover,” and “Finally” help signal progression. However, the linking can feel mechanical because several sentences begin with similar age-group phrases, and “Meanwhile” does not clearly connect the two trends in the overview. The phrase “Both of there percentages” also makes the reference unclear. For stronger cohesion, group the data around the contrasting trends—for example, men’s decline and recovery versus women’s rise and later fall—and use clearer references such as “the two rates.”

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “reached its peak,” “took the lead,” and “remained lower,” which allows you to describe the chart and make comparisons. Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, however: “suddenly reached its peak” suggests an abrupt change, while “physical activities in women were still about 53 percent” is an awkward way to describe participation rates. There are also spelling and form errors, including “thier,” “oldage,” and “there” where “their” is intended. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully; terms such as “participation rate,” “rose,” “declined,” and “levelled off” would make the descriptions more natural and concise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “while” and comparisons using “as compared to.” Most sentences communicate the data clearly, and the past tense is generally appropriate for reporting figures from 2010. Some grammatical errors remain. In “Both of there percentages became almost the same,” the possessive reference is incorrect and the construction is awkward; “the two rates were almost equal” would be clearer. “At ages 35-44, the percentage of women increased again … while it decreased in males again” also has an unclear pronoun reference. Check articles and sentence construction in phrases such as “at the age group of 45-54.” More varied, accurately controlled comparisons would improve the range and precision.

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