Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram shows us the percentage of Australian male and female in different age group doing regular physical activity in the year of 2010. At first glance, we can notice the highest percentage of doing physical activity is 53.3 % and it's done by the women of the age of 45-54 .On the contrary, the lowest percentage of doing physical activity is 39% and it is done by the age of 35-44 men. The graph chart shows that 15-24 aged male do 52.8% physical activity and the women do 47.7 % physical activity like swimming, running, walking e.t.c. After that com the people between 25 to 34 . But, this time male percentage dropped and it's is only 42.2 % and women percentage increased a little bit , it's 48.9 .Next, 35-44 aged people group come . This time also men percentage dropped to 39.5% and it's the lowest percentage of this chart. And the women percentage also increased this time and it's 52.5. However, then come the 45-54 age group. In this group male do 43.1% and female do 53.3 % physical activity .Moreover ,next age group (55 tp 64) male do 45.1% and female do 53 % activity. At last ,65 and over age group men do 46.7 % and female do 47.1 physical activity. Overall, our women do more physical activity than men .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You report the chart’s main comparisons and most figures accurately, including the male peak among 15–24-year-olds (52.8%), the female peak among 45–54-year-olds (53.3%), and the male low among 35–44-year-olds (39.5%). The overview that women were more active overall is relevant, though it would be more precise to say women recorded higher rates in five of the six age groups; men led only in the youngest group. The response also follows the age groups and includes useful detail. However, the overview could better summarise the contrasting trends: men’s rate fell before rising, while women’s generally rose to middle age and then declined. The examples of activities such as swimming and running are not shown in the chart, so avoid adding unsupported information.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows the age groups in a generally understandable order, and phrases such as “At first glance,” “However,” and “At last” help signal movement through the data. Nevertheless, the progression is often mechanical because nearly every age group is introduced as the next item, rather than being organised into meaningful comparisons or trend groups. The response is also presented as one long paragraph, which makes the overview and supporting details harder to distinguish. Some linking is awkward or unclear, as in “After that com the people between 25 to 34.” Use separate paragraphs for the overview and details, and connect related figures directly—for example, contrast the sexes within each age group or group the male and female trends.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough chart-related vocabulary to communicate the data, including “percentage,” “dropped,” “increased,” and “age group.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, particularly repeated forms of “do physical activity.” Some word choices and collocations sound unnatural, such as “the highest percentage of doing physical activity” and “our women.” There are also spelling or typing slips, including “com” and “tp,” which reduce the polish of the report. Aim for concise, conventional chart language and vary your descriptions of change. For instance, describe a figure as a “participation rate,” and use verbs such as “fell,” “rose,” or “peaked” where they accurately summarise the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, grammatical control is uneven, especially with articles, plurals, agreement, and sentence boundaries. Examples include “Australian male and female” and “different age group,” where plural forms are needed, and “the women of the age of 45-54,” which has an awkward article and structure. In “male do 43.1%,” the subject and verb do not agree, while “it's is only 42.2%” contains an unnecessary repeated verb. Punctuation spacing is also inconsistent, with full stops attached to the next sentence. Practise accurate comparative sentence patterns, such as “The rate for women was higher than that for men,” and proofread each sentence for agreement and punctuation.

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