Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 7.5)

The bar chat illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who took part in regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, famales were ahead in the most age groups except the youngest, where males were clearly ahead. However, among the oldest group both genders were almost equal, with females ahead with few percentage points.

Males highest point was in the 15 to 24 group, at 52.8%. Their lowest rate was in that of aged 35 to 44 group, at about 39.5%, and it then gradually rose to 46.7% points in the 65 and over. In the oldest group males trailed females only by 0.4 percentage points.

Females were ahead in five of the six groups in total. The peak rate was in the 45 to 54 group, at about 53.3%. Their lowest was 47.1% in the 65 and over. The biggest gap was in the 35 to 44 group, where females were ahead with 13 percentage points (52.5% against 39.5%). However in the 15 to 24 group, females trailed males with 5 proportionate points (47.7% against 52.8%).

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 8.0

The response selects and reports the main features accurately: men peak in the youngest group and reach their low in the 35–44 group, while women lead in five groups and peak at 45–54. The overview also identifies the near-equal figures among people aged 65 and over, and the comparisons for the largest gap and the youngest group are supported by the chart. This gives the account strong coverage and well-developed comparisons. To make the reporting still more complete, mention the women’s broadly high, stable rates across the middle age groups, rather than focusing mainly on their peak and lowest point. The phrase “gradually rose” for men is a slight simplification because the rate first rises after 35–44, but the overall trend is represented clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5

The four-paragraph structure is effective: an introduction is followed by an overview and then separate descriptions of male and female figures. Information progresses logically, and comparisons such as “However, in the 15 to 24 group” help signal a contrast. The overview also prepares the reader for the details that follow. Some linking and reference could be more precise: “Their lowest” requires the reader to infer that “their” refers to females, and “in total” in “five of the six groups in total” adds little. The repeated use of “However” for contrasts is understandable but slightly predictable. More varied, concise transitions and clearer references would make the cohesion more flexible and less noticeable.

Lexical Resource: Band 7.0

There is a useful range of task-appropriate vocabulary, including “proportion,” “regular physical activity,” “peak rate,” “trailed,” and “percentage points.” These choices allow the writer to describe trends and compare values with reasonable precision. Some collocations and expressions are less natural or exact: “males highest point” would be better expressed as “men’s highest rate,” while “females were ahead with 13 percentage points” and “5 proportionate points” are awkward. “Bar chat” is also a spelling error for “bar chart,” and “famales” should be “females.” Aim for consistent, natural statistical phrasing, especially “percentage-point difference,” and check spelling carefully to strengthen an otherwise adequate range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

The response uses a mix of simple and more complex structures, including the overview clause “where males were clearly ahead” and the comparison beginning “where females were ahead.” Many sentences communicate the data clearly, and punctuation generally supports the meaning. However, some grammatical control is uneven. In “Males highest point,” the possessive form is missing; “Their lowest was 47.1%” omits a noun such as “rate”; and “in that of aged 35 to 44 group” has an awkward, incomplete grammatical construction. The sentence “with females ahead with few percentage points” also has a faulty repeated preposition pattern. Use complete noun phrases and check possessives, articles, and prepositions when constructing comparisons.

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