Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and female in several age groups who did regular physical exercises in the year 2010.

Overall , the highest number of people in different age group who did the daily physical activity was women in almost all ages, except 15-24 where men did more physical activity which was 52.8% ,where women did almost 48% in 2010.

The significant percentage of women who did the regular physical activity was the age between 55 to 64 which was specifically 53% compared to men which was almost only 45%. After that, the highest female groups who did physical exercises daily was 35-44(52.5%) and the age from 25-34(48.9%) where the men was only 39.5% and 42.2%.

On the other hand , the youngest ages who did physical work was men which was almost 53% compared to women who declined was only 47.7% . Those people who are 65 or over have done similarl proportion of activities was almost between 47%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast: women recorded higher participation in most age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. Several figures are also reported accurately, including 52.8% for young men, 53% for women aged 55–64, and the similar rates for those aged 65 and over. However, the overview is not fully precise: “highest number” should refer to the highest percentage, and the peak for women is actually 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds, not the 55–64 group. The account also omits the overall low point for men, at 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds, and does not clearly describe the rise in male participation after that. Select and compare the key highs, lows, and trends more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs that compare age groups. Phrases such as “Overall” and “On the other hand” help signal the intended relationships. However, progression is uneven: the second paragraph moves between several female figures and male comparisons without a clear organising principle, while the final paragraph repeats the youngest-group comparison already given in the overview. Some linking is also awkward or unclear, particularly “After that” and “Those people who are 65 or over.” Group the data systematically—for example, describe the male pattern first, then the female pattern and the main contrasts—and use references that make each comparison easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a chart, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “compared to,” and “declined.” This gives you a workable range for the task, but several choices are imprecise or repetitive. “Highest number” does not accurately describe percentages, and “daily physical activity” suggests a frequency that the chart does not specify; it reports regular activity. “Physical exercises,” “physical work,” and “physical activity” are used interchangeably, although the latter is the most suitable term here. There are also word-form and collocation problems, such as “Australian males and female” and “similarl proportion.” Aim for precise chart language and avoid adding meanings not shown by the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “where” and clauses introduced by “who.” However, errors in agreement, sentence construction, and punctuation are noticeable and sometimes make relationships difficult to interpret. For example, “the highest number of people … was women” has faulty agreement and structure, while “Those people who are 65 or over have done similarl proportion” is not a well-formed comparison. The sentence beginning “After that” also lacks a clear grammatical link between the age groups and the male figures. Check singular and plural forms, use consistent past-tense reporting, and build comparisons with clear patterns such as “women’s rate was …, compared with men’s rate of …”.

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