Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph compares percentage of Australian men and women of different age groups participated in physical activities in 2010.

Overall, women has participated more then men, the proportion of men is higher in the 15-24 year age group and in the age group 65 and above, men and women has participated almost equally.

In the youngest age group, the percentage of male participants is 52.8%, which in higher then female. In contrast, the proportion of male participants in the age group 35 to 44 is comparatively less then female with 52.5%. The 25 to 34 year age group the percentage of men is 42.2% and women are considerable higher with 48.9%.

In the oldest age group, proportion of both male and female participants is almost same, but female participants are 0.4% more than men. The proportion of women participants of age group 45 to 53 and 55 to 64 is almost same, but with the difference of 0.3% and male with the difference of 2%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and provide an overview, noting that men lead in the youngest group and that women are generally more active. Several figures are reported accurately, including 52.8% for young men, 48.9% for women aged 25–34, and the near-equal rates among those aged 65 and over. However, the overview is not fully accurate: men are not higher in the oldest group; women are slightly ahead, at 47.1% versus 46.7%. The comparison for ages 35–44 also gives the women’s figure but omits the men’s 39.5%. In addition, “45 to 53” misstates the 45–54 category. Develop the overview around the main pattern and check each age band and comparison against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing age-group comparisons. Phrases such as “In contrast” help signal a change in comparison, and the information is broadly grouped by age. However, the progression is weakened by an inaccurate overview and by comparisons that are not always complete or clearly connected. For example, the sentence about ages 35–44 gives only the female figure, while the final sentence combines two age groups without clearly stating their values. The repeated use of “the proportion” also makes the account feel somewhat mechanical. Organise the body around clear comparisons—perhaps the younger groups first, then the middle and older groups—and use concise linking phrases to show how the figures relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of chart-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “proportion,” “participants,” and “age group,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at comparison through phrases such as “in contrast” and “almost same.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, however. “Participated in physical activities” is less natural for describing the chart than “engaged in regular physical activity,” while “women are considerable higher” uses the wrong form and sounds unnatural. Repeating “proportion” and “participants” limits variety. Aim for precise, natural reporting language, such as “the figure for women,” “the rate,” and “exceeded,” while ensuring that comparative expressions are correctly formed.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “In contrast” and a clause beginning “which.” The main comparisons can usually be understood, but some errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction remain. For example, “women has participated” should be “women participated” or “women had a higher participation rate,” and “men and women has participated” has a subject–verb agreement error. In “which in higher then female,” the clause is incomplete and the comparison is not grammatically formed. The final sentence also lacks a clear main structure. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with forms such as “the rate for women was higher than that for men,” and check agreement and tense throughout.

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