Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chat illustates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who were involved in regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, females were ahead of males in all age groups except the youngest, where males were clearly ahead. The highest percentage was in the middle age group. However gap was marginal in oldest age group.

Males peak rate was 52.8% in 15 to 24 age group. Whereas, the lowest proportion of points were in 35 to 44 age group, about 39.5% from their, the ratio gradually increased to 46.7% in the 65 and over age group.

Female highest was in 45 to 54 age group and it was about 53.3%. However, the biggest difference was in the 35 to 44 age group, where males trailed females with 13 percentage points (52.5% against 39.5%). The competition was tough in the 65 and over age group, where females led the group with 0.4 percentage points (47.1% against 46.7%)

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrast accurately: women recorded higher activity in every age group except 15–24, and you report the male peak (52.8%) and low (39.5%) as well as the female peak (53.3%). The comparison of the 35–44 figures and the small 0.4-point gap among the oldest group are useful supporting details. However, the overview is not fully precise: “The highest percentage was in the middle age group” is vague and could suggest a single overall peak, rather than specifying that women peaked at 45–54 while men peaked at 15–24. Also, the female trend across age groups is not described, and “the competition was tough” is an imprecise way to report a close comparison. Make the overview more specific and summarise both series’ patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs describing male and female figures. This makes the information easy to follow, and comparisons such as the 35–44 gap are placed in a relevant context. Some linking is less controlled, however. “Whereas” begins a sentence fragment after the male peak, and repeated uses of “However” do not always express a clear contrast. The overview’s “middle age group” is also vague, which weakens the progression from the general summary to the detailed figures. Use complete linked sentences and organise the details in a consistent sequence, such as age-group trends or male figures followed by female figures, with more precise references.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “regular physical activity,” “peak,” “lowest,” and “percentage points.” These choices help communicate the chart’s main comparisons. There are also several inaccurate or unnatural expressions that limit precision: “bar chat” and “illustates” contain spelling errors, “proportion of points” is not an appropriate description of a percentage, and “the competition was tough” is too informal and figurative for an academic report. “Females were ahead” is understandable but less formal than a direct comparison of the rates. Aim for accurate, neutral chart language and check spelling; terms such as “participation rate,” “recorded,” and “the difference was narrow” would suit this task better.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “the 35 to 44 age group, where males trailed females” and a sentence describing a change over time. Most of the intended meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors and punctuation choices reduce accuracy. “Whereas” is used as a sentence opener without a main clause, and “However gap was marginal” is missing an article. “Males peak rate” needs a possessive form, while “about 39.5% from their” has an unclear and incomplete construction. There is also a comma splice in the final sentence. Build complete clauses around contrast linkers, check articles and possessives, and use full stops or conjunctions to join independent clauses.

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