Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line map illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who were involved in regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, females were ahead of males in all the groups except the youngest, where males were clearly ahead. However both genders were almost equal in oldest age group with females ahead with few percentage points.

The peak rate for males was in the 15 to 24 age group, about 52.8% against 47.7%. However the lowest ratio of points was 39.5% in the 35 to 44 age group, which gradually increased to 46.7% in the 65 and over.

Female highest ratio was 53.3% in th 45 to 54 age group. However the biggest difference was in the 35 to 44 age group, where females led the graph with 13 percentage points (52.5% against 39.5%). In the 65 and over, females were ahead with 0.4 percentage point (47.1% against 46.7%).

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: women had higher participation in every age group except 15–24, and the oldest group showed only a small difference. The figures you select for the male peak and low, the female peak, and the largest and smallest gender gaps are consistent with the chart. This gives the response a clear overview and relevant supporting comparisons. To make the account more fully developed, include the female figures across more age groups and describe their pattern: rates rise to a high around ages 45–64 before falling in the oldest group. Also, “gradually increased” for men after the low point is a little broad, since the rise is interrupted by distinct age-group changes. Overall, the key features are addressed and supported, though some trends receive less detail than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a clear sequence: an introduction, an overview, then details about men and women. This makes the main comparison easy to follow, and linking words such as “Overall” and “However” help signal relationships between points. The organisation is coherent, but cohesion is sometimes mechanical: “However” begins several sentences where a more precise contrast or a simple continuation would work better. The final paragraph also moves from the female peak to the largest gap and then the oldest group without explaining the progression across the age categories. To strengthen the flow, group comparisons by age pattern or by gender, and use references such as “this rate” or “by contrast” clearly and selectively.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “peak rate,” “lowest,” and “percentage points,” and the meaning is generally clear. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a bar chart: “line map” misidentifies the visual, “ahead” is informal, and “lowest ratio of points” does not express the intended measure. “Female highest ratio” is also an awkward construction. These choices show attempts to use varied language, but imprecise collocations and word forms limit clarity and naturalness. Prefer standard chart language such as “bar chart,” “participation rate,” and “women’s rate was highest.” Check spelling as well: “th” should be “the.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “where males were clearly ahead” and a comparison structure with “against.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “in oldest age group” needs an article, and “Female highest ratio was” lacks a possessive or determiner and has an awkward noun phrase. In “females were ahead with 0.4 percentage point,” the singular form does not agree with the quantity. The sentence beginning “However both genders” also needs punctuation after the introductory linker. Aim to check articles, possessives, number agreement, and punctuation, while retaining the complex comparisons you already attempt.

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