Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart below compares the proportions of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. The percentage of age group of men and women doing regular activity in 2010.

Overall, the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular activity in 2010. In 45 to 54, female had the highest figure, whereas In 35 to 44, male had the lowest illustration in this chart. The percentage is Australia over the different period in this representation.

Looking at the details, the different age group in this diagram. In 15 ton 24, male are increase and percentage is 52.8, and female are decrease and percentage is 47.7. In 25 to 34, male are decline the ratio is 42,2, whereas female are climb the percentage is 48.9, while in 35 to 44 male are feel the percentage is 39.5, and female are increase the percentage is 52.5.

On the other hand, in 45 to 54, male are downward trend the percentage is 43.1, and female are upward trend the proportion is 53.3. In 55 to 64, male are decrease and female are increase the ratio is 45.1, male and female is 53. In 65 and over male are few fell and female are little climb the proportion is 46.7, and male is 47.1.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include several accurate figures, such as 52.8% for men aged 15–24 and 53.3% for women aged 45–54. However, the response only partly fulfils the task because the overview is unclear and some key comparisons are misstated. The highest female figure is 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds, but the lowest male figure is 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds; your overview mentions these, yet the repeated sentence fragments obscure the main trends. Several descriptions also reverse the data: for example, men’s 15–24 figure is not increasing, and women’s 15–24 figure is not decreasing. Focus on the overall pattern—women exceed men in every group except the youngest—and report comparisons accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details for the age groups, and phrases such as “Looking at the details” and “On the other hand” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, there is no clear progression because the overview repeats the introduction and several sentences are fragments, including “The percentage of age group…” and “The different age group in this diagram.” Linking expressions are sometimes used inaccurately: “On the other hand” does not introduce a meaningful contrast between the final age groups, and “while” joins details without clarifying their relationship. Group the figures into clear comparisons and use transitions only where they express a genuine contrast or sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “percentage,” “figure,” and “ratio,” and the reader can generally recognise that you are describing data. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate enough to make the account difficult to follow. Phrases such as “male are feel the percentage,” “male are downward trend,” and “male are few fell” do not express the intended changes naturally. “Illustration” is also an unsuitable substitute for a data figure, while “different period” mislabels age groups as periods of time. Use precise reporting language such as “stood at,” “rose to,” or “fell to,” and avoid describing a single set of age-group figures as a trend over time.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine comparisons in longer sentences, for example with “whereas” and “while,” but the range of sentence structures is limited and these attempts often contain errors. Subject–verb agreement is frequently incorrect: “male are increase” and “female are climb” should use a suitable subject and verb form. Other problems include missing or incorrect articles and prepositions, as in “In 45 to 54,” and unclear sentence construction in “male and female is 53.” The opening also repeats an incomplete sentence, and capitalisation after commas is inconsistent. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and a correctly formed past-tense reporting verb, then check agreement and punctuation.

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