Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The statistical analysis illustrate the physical activity of Australian males and females on daily basis in the year 2010,Overall the female popullation shoes the significant dominance throught the year despite a little dominance by the men in the adults. While the men ratio remain decreased in the year.

The age group females from 25 to 64 are seems to be more involve in physical activities with round about 53% and the men remain dormant in the same age group with about 39% to 45% respectively.

In contrast the health related exercise find to be more common in the men of age group 15 to 24 years dominating the women. However the older individuals of both the genders are involed in the same number making aproximately 47% of all.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify relevant comparisons, including women’s higher participation across most age groups and men’s higher figure among 15–24-year-olds. The overview also attempts to describe the broad pattern. However, the account is partial and some claims are unclear or inaccurate: “despite a little dominance by the men in the adults” does not specify the young age group, and men’s participation did not simply “remain decreased”—it fell to 39.5% at ages 35–44 before rising. The older groups are described as having the “same number,” although the figures are close rather than identical. The response is also 22 words below the required minimum, limiting the detail available. Add a clearer overview and report the main changes with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic three-paragraph structure, moving from an attempted overview to comparisons between age groups. Linking expressions such as “In contrast” and “However” show an effort to connect ideas. Nevertheless, progression is not consistently clear: the opening combines several claims in one sentence, and “the adults” does not clearly identify which age group is meant. The second paragraph groups ages 25–64 but gives a broad range for men without explaining the variation, while the final paragraph shifts to older people. Use a more deliberate sequence—overview first, then younger and middle-aged groups, followed by the oldest group—and make references explicit. This would improve the flow beyond the current basic organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “age group,” “physical activities,” “dominating,” and “approximately,” so the reader can identify the subject and intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward, such as “statistical analysis illustrate,” “female population shows the significant dominance,” and “men remain dormant.” Spelling errors, including “popullation,” “throught,” and “involed,” are also noticeable and reduce clarity. Aim for precise chart language rather than evaluative or conversational expressions: describe participation as higher or lower, and use terms such as “proportion” and “rate.” Check spelling and choose natural collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to use more than simple sentences, for example with “While” and “However,” but complex structures are often faulty and the range remains limited. The opening has agreement and sentence-boundary problems: “The statistical analysis illustrate” needs a singular verb, and a full stop or suitable conjunction is needed before “Overall.” Other examples include “the age group females … are seems to be,” which combines incompatible verb forms, and “the men ratio remain decreased,” which has agreement and tense/form problems. Articles and prepositions are also inconsistent, as in “on daily basis.” These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement, verb forms, and punctuation.

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